for An Attempt at Normalcy4/10/2007 c1 kris bartolome
short, but the way you tell the story is mesmerizing. in that one page, you let me feel for jay. this is great stuff.
short, but the way you tell the story is mesmerizing. in that one page, you let me feel for jay. this is great stuff.
2/22/2006 c1 
17life like whoa
A nice start, I hope I can look forward to an update.
(oh and yeah like foodaddict said, I don't know if you were planning on adding about the main character in later chapters but I'd like to know alittle more about him.)
17life like whoaA nice start, I hope I can look forward to an update.
(oh and yeah like foodaddict said, I don't know if you were planning on adding about the main character in later chapters but I'd like to know alittle more about him.)
1/24/2006 c1 foodaddict
This seems too close to a certain reality for comfort, but I like how you write. :D I was hoping it'd be longer though-hehe-a little more something on the main character. :D I feel like you were trying to tell us something with his name being an attempt at normalcy...I think if you fleshed things out it'd be easier to see. Nonetheless, looking forward to an update. :D
This seems too close to a certain reality for comfort, but I like how you write. :D I was hoping it'd be longer though-hehe-a little more something on the main character. :D I feel like you were trying to tell us something with his name being an attempt at normalcy...I think if you fleshed things out it'd be easier to see. Nonetheless, looking forward to an update. :D