for tread marks3/23/2006 c1 
74laughter at the funeral
wow..i like the "slip-sliding my way to you"...and i can quite relate...very good job...
truly yours...
74laughter at the funeralwow..i like the "slip-sliding my way to you"...and i can quite relate...very good job...
truly yours...
1/22/2006 c1 50Chandra-Moon
I like the rambling rhythms of this; the slight, subtle rhyming; "though I wanted nothing more than to stay, i ran, though I wanted nothing more than you. (to stay)" was a beautiful ending. Lacked imagery, but that didn't affect this poem badly; it was beautiful in itself. Good job.
50Chandra-MoonI like the rambling rhythms of this; the slight, subtle rhyming; "though I wanted nothing more than to stay, i ran, though I wanted nothing more than you. (to stay)" was a beautiful ending. Lacked imagery, but that didn't affect this poem badly; it was beautiful in itself. Good job.
1/20/2006 c1 katt's got your tongue
GORGEOUS. brilliant work. i love the line "in battles of flesh-land and way-back-when" and "that seems to intrude/ (how rude)/ when i'm trying to be mellow (dramatic)/" love the parentheses darling. great imagery. loveitloveitloveit!
GORGEOUS. brilliant work. i love the line "in battles of flesh-land and way-back-when" and "that seems to intrude/ (how rude)/ when i'm trying to be mellow (dramatic)/" love the parentheses darling. great imagery. loveitloveitloveit!