for A Day in the Life4/30/2007 c2 ghufran gufi
a hilarious 2 chapters which really wants ont to read on..
just keep the names simpler and stick to the scene longer, you seem to jump from one place to another...
but awesome use of the red bull thing that was superb.
a hilarious 2 chapters which really wants ont to read on..
just keep the names simpler and stick to the scene longer, you seem to jump from one place to another...
but awesome use of the red bull thing that was superb.
1/30/2006 c1 
10Raiya Masroor
hey I LOVED YOUR STORY ! both the characters are soo funny seriuosly It made me laugh...i wish u would update though..i am adding u 2 my fave list so i get 2 know when u update...
10Raiya Masroorhey I LOVED YOUR STORY ! both the characters are soo funny seriuosly It made me laugh...i wish u would update though..i am adding u 2 my fave list so i get 2 know when u update...