for Unfinished Sonata2/11/2006 c2 
237classic violet
Second half, oh my oh my, like a grand finale those last two lines were. Great job!
237classic violetSecond half, oh my oh my, like a grand finale those last two lines were. Great job!
2/11/2006 c1 classic violet
It's interesting. I love the first half, gorgeous! This poem is beautiful.
It's interesting. I love the first half, gorgeous! This poem is beautiful.
2/8/2006 c3 879Moondog Dozier
A light innocence flows through this part as well, save the contrast of first line, third stanza. The whole thing is really wonderfully well written, because of the tone that you've captured throughout. Great work.
879Moondog DozierA light innocence flows through this part as well, save the contrast of first line, third stanza. The whole thing is really wonderfully well written, because of the tone that you've captured throughout. Great work.
2/8/2006 c2 Moondog Dozier
Wonderful sound works in this part. A kind of childlike innocence comes across.
Wonderful sound works in this part. A kind of childlike innocence comes across.
2/6/2006 c3 124in theory
Some people don't even wonder why. No questions asked, it's so simple and tragic because it's so plain. Sigh. Nice work, as always. Update soon :)
124in theorySome people don't even wonder why. No questions asked, it's so simple and tragic because it's so plain. Sigh. Nice work, as always. Update soon :)
2/6/2006 c2 in theory
Never finished, it seems. A little dizzying, and feathery. Pathetic in all the nice senses of that word.
Never finished, it seems. A little dizzying, and feathery. Pathetic in all the nice senses of that word.
1/28/2006 c3 a lonely september
'among fluttering sheets and we only wonder why' god, that was just so simply beautiful. i loved the first three lines as well, very pretty and written so... gracefully(?) it's strange. i've always found it hard to believe little hands could land on wrong keys, they're so perfect. the imperfection makes .you. perfect.
'among fluttering sheets and we only wonder why' god, that was just so simply beautiful. i loved the first three lines as well, very pretty and written so... gracefully(?) it's strange. i've always found it hard to believe little hands could land on wrong keys, they're so perfect. the imperfection makes .you. perfect.
1/26/2006 c1 23Nothing Profound
I was trailing through the just-ins and was becoming quite bored until I found this. Lovely expression; well done.
23Nothing ProfoundI was trailing through the just-ins and was becoming quite bored until I found this. Lovely expression; well done.
1/26/2006 c2 a lonely september
well i'm not going to leave reviews for both chapters cos i'm lazy like that, but i like this so far, i hope you continue, because i intend on continuing to read. i liked this. very pretty and your style of writing is lovely.
well i'm not going to leave reviews for both chapters cos i'm lazy like that, but i like this so far, i hope you continue, because i intend on continuing to read. i liked this. very pretty and your style of writing is lovely.
1/24/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Excellent visuals. This creates a well linked compilation of like things. Well written.
879Moondog DozierExcellent visuals. This creates a well linked compilation of like things. Well written.
1/24/2006 c1 10just a teardrop
beautiful imagery. i love it! great poem!
btw, yeah, ur right, u did read my poem b4 - but i took it off and changed it a bit. but, lol, thnx 4 remembering! :D
10just a teardropbeautiful imagery. i love it! great poem!
btw, yeah, ur right, u did read my poem b4 - but i took it off and changed it a bit. but, lol, thnx 4 remembering! :D
1/24/2006 c1 124in theory
Pretty imagery, so light and free. So many of my "poems" (whatever you call free verse nowadays) are interlinked, it's something you just can't help. Of course some are isolated and special or personal or whatever but most of them follow some similar vein. I have no idea what that is though. Peace, keep up the great work.
And yeah, I haven't been on here in awhile; had a lot on with college. Still kept writing just daren't post cus I always get sucked into being on this site 6 hours a day when I update.
124in theoryPretty imagery, so light and free. So many of my "poems" (whatever you call free verse nowadays) are interlinked, it's something you just can't help. Of course some are isolated and special or personal or whatever but most of them follow some similar vein. I have no idea what that is though. Peace, keep up the great work.
And yeah, I haven't been on here in awhile; had a lot on with college. Still kept writing just daren't post cus I always get sucked into being on this site 6 hours a day when I update.
1/23/2006 c1 4SerialXLain
I love piano so that's why I read this...and the imagery of this is incredibly beautiful and morbid...I love it. I want it. I'm jealous of you. :0!
xox love
4SerialXLainI love piano so that's why I read this...and the imagery of this is incredibly beautiful and morbid...I love it. I want it. I'm jealous of you. :0!
xox love