for My Fist Through Your Window1/28/2006 c1 
12melodylzx
Wow.
Really good poems are rare, and I must say yours qualifies as one. I love that continuous line style, and those words inside the (brackets). COOL. (:
And that symbolism of stabbing the carved figure over and over again so that he'll be imperfect... wow.
12melodylzxWow.
Really good poems are rare, and I must say yours qualifies as one. I love that continuous line style, and those words inside the (brackets). COOL. (:
And that symbolism of stabbing the carved figure over and over again so that he'll be imperfect... wow.
1/27/2006 c1 47Yuffei
Whao. I would like to point out at this point i never want to pish you off. . But, as far as the work goes, all i can say is whao. I actually felt the anger in the first couple of lines. Keep it up!
47YuffeiWhao. I would like to point out at this point i never want to pish you off. . But, as far as the work goes, all i can say is whao. I actually felt the anger in the first couple of lines. Keep it up!
1/27/2006 c1 Safira
The pain emanating from this piece is undeniably raw and intense. From the imagery of carving out smiles to chewing on razorblades, the persona’s whirlwind of anguish and split second insanity demands the reader to hurt with them. And to convey such frenetic emotions coherently with structure and poetic imagery is all the more amazing. Powerful.
Cheers – Autumn.
The pain emanating from this piece is undeniably raw and intense. From the imagery of carving out smiles to chewing on razorblades, the persona’s whirlwind of anguish and split second insanity demands the reader to hurt with them. And to convey such frenetic emotions coherently with structure and poetic imagery is all the more amazing. Powerful.
Cheers – Autumn.
1/25/2006 c1 13Shadowhound
interesting. you do an amazing job portraying your emotions, and the descriptions you use are excellent. i particularly liked the brief words in parenthenses. overall a very sad poem. it doesn't put my life in perspective or any of the things i want it to do. it just is. and that is the best thing it could be.
Shadowhound
13Shadowhoundinteresting. you do an amazing job portraying your emotions, and the descriptions you use are excellent. i particularly liked the brief words in parenthenses. overall a very sad poem. it doesn't put my life in perspective or any of the things i want it to do. it just is. and that is the best thing it could be.
Shadowhound
1/24/2006 c1 39SliversofSilverPain
wow. That's well written. Very intense. It drew me into it and I couldn't stop reading until the end. Bloody well done! That doesn't happen to me easily
39SliversofSilverPainwow. That's well written. Very intense. It drew me into it and I couldn't stop reading until the end. Bloody well done! That doesn't happen to me easily
1/24/2006 c1 141AllyCred
WOW...this is amazing and i love everything about it, ur raw emotion is so intense and the wording just impacts that even more, i can feel the pain radiating out from this and just knowing the feeling of being torn up is side is horrible, well done for being able to put this down in words, i also love the bit about "chewing the razorblades" it was very well written and had such an impact on the tone of the poem. Well done.
Lots of love~AC~
141AllyCredWOW...this is amazing and i love everything about it, ur raw emotion is so intense and the wording just impacts that even more, i can feel the pain radiating out from this and just knowing the feeling of being torn up is side is horrible, well done for being able to put this down in words, i also love the bit about "chewing the razorblades" it was very well written and had such an impact on the tone of the poem. Well done.
Lots of love~AC~
1/24/2006 c1 28emilyrachel18
This poem is excellant and i'm not just saying this i really mean it. The raaw emotion that flows within it is bound in each word that is written. I just feel sad that you must feel this way, so torn up inside. I think it is a great talent to let it out though, and you acomplish this so well.
28emilyrachel18This poem is excellant and i'm not just saying this i really mean it. The raaw emotion that flows within it is bound in each word that is written. I just feel sad that you must feel this way, so torn up inside. I think it is a great talent to let it out though, and you acomplish this so well.
1/24/2006 c1 79Ashes.to.Acid
This piece seems almost manic, I love it~ The descriptions were stunning and the last line held power.
79Ashes.to.AcidThis piece seems almost manic, I love it~ The descriptions were stunning and the last line held power.
1/24/2006 c1 1k+Faithless Juliet
Powerful detail and imagery; I loved the beginning when you talked about the glass and then the chewing on razorblades line. Powerful piece all around. Keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.
1k+Faithless JulietPowerful detail and imagery; I loved the beginning when you talked about the glass and then the chewing on razorblades line. Powerful piece all around. Keep up the good work.
Much love,Juliet.