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2/15/2006 c3 2Cirex
Very nice piece. I wish I could have seen the picture though. If the other two worked, and this one didn't... hmm. Maybe put it in brackets? That might fool FP. I just copied and pasted the link into the URL bar anyway.
2/15/2006 c2 Cirex
Aw... both stories that I've read are sad. :(

One thing though: "Even despair had deserted her." I don't know if you can really say this. Maybe that despair was the only thing that hadn't abandoned her, or something. I guess that doesn't exactly follow the theme of her being alone, but if despair has deserted her, then that sounds like she's happier now.

Anyway, I hope the last one is happier, lol.
2/15/2006 c1 Cirex
Aww... sad ending there.

I think the first thing that caught my eye about this piece was your descriptions. You have a real talent with those (I've probably said this before :P).

I checked out the picture too, and I felt they matched nicely. Seemed like a real AM-hours setting though. Nobody else on the streets, all dark, closed. All except the diner.
2/13/2006 c3 Arkash
Another beautiful piece. Though it's a bit short, I enjoyed it nontheless.

P.S. I know that paintint too, and you done a good job. *_*
2/13/2006 c3 NO LONGER USING
This was excellent, i absolutley adore your writing. It's so descritpive and perfect-i can like see the things you describe wow. Yes and love the title...it was perfect for this. p.s. i've written a new fic, and i my opinion better than the other one o wrote so go ahead and check it out, hope you like. lacy
2/2/2006 c2 Arkash
I know that painting. It's one of the most beautiful of Waterhouse's works.

Very haunting. You captured the essence of the painting and put them into beautiful words.

No CC.

Great job! *_*
2/2/2006 c1 Arkash

I just couldn't resist a story about paintings.

CC: "Laure had been delicate, "petit"" should be [petite]

CC: 'Scotty, I'll have the usual.' should have single quatation marks.

I love the descirptions in this piece, like: "..a bored hawk, circling the sky..., and, Her lashes made sweeping ebony crescent moons,..." Beautiful!

Very nice writing. I'd love to see the picture, but the link doesn't work.

1/28/2006 c2 20Pheobe Meryll
that was beautiful. It reminds me of the melencholy flavor of anderson's 'the little mermaid'...I looked at the picture, and got a different idea but your interpretation was interesting.
1/28/2006 c3 7Alankria
Very nice, though short. I think there's one mistake: 'not matter if the world is only half bright' should be 'no matter...' Other than that, good description, I could imagine her walking. You didn't provide the picture link though.
1/24/2006 c2 Alankria
This reminds me of a song, 'When Mermaids Cry' by Eagle Eye Cherry, which I have now downloaded, and I recommend you to get your hands on too. Again, I have no CC. You have managed to blend poetry and prose into a wonderfully evocative piece about broken hearts and human cruelty. Though your longer stories are good, I truly think your greatest talent lies with these shorter pieces. Can't wait for more!
1/24/2006 c1 Alankria
Wow... Simply, wow. This is incredible. You manage to capture the essence of the painting whilst at the same time weaving a wonderful story of broken love and bitter regrets. I have absolutely no CC for this, congrats!

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