for my skin8/7/2006 c1 do not resuscitate
beautiful imagery and a thought provoking idea. this is a little belated (understatement), but i'm certain you'll have no trouble getting published. your work is brilliant.
beautiful imagery and a thought provoking idea. this is a little belated (understatement), but i'm certain you'll have no trouble getting published. your work is brilliant.
3/19/2006 c1 
612simpleplan13
creepy and well done.. I love the whoel out of skin thing... its creepy and cool
612simpleplan13creepy and well done.. I love the whoel out of skin thing... its creepy and cool
1/26/2006 c1 63lackluster
breathtaking. it's amazing how i can almost feel and see exacty you're writing.
"dandelion breath" is beautiful.
63lacklusterbreathtaking. it's amazing how i can almost feel and see exacty you're writing.
"dandelion breath" is beautiful.
1/25/2006 c1 29Katterree Fengari
lovely imagery...I like the "estranged citizens/i'll never have the privilege to meet"the second line starts with a comma, is that a typo from the first line?I can't quite think of a literal meaning for "my skin will sail on without me/fluttering, flying, alone." I'm trying to think what you mean by your skin peeling off you and leaving you...maybe dead skin, but that would be the same free idea... I like "dandelion breath"- like when you blow on dandelions to skatter the seeds...
29Katterree Fengarilovely imagery...I like the "estranged citizens/i'll never have the privilege to meet"the second line starts with a comma, is that a typo from the first line?I can't quite think of a literal meaning for "my skin will sail on without me/fluttering, flying, alone." I'm trying to think what you mean by your skin peeling off you and leaving you...maybe dead skin, but that would be the same free idea... I like "dandelion breath"- like when you blow on dandelions to skatter the seeds...
1/25/2006 c1 144chaos called creation
Heh, dandelion breath is a pretty way of putting it. I like how it jumps from thought to thought, but is still poetically put. Good job
144chaos called creationHeh, dandelion breath is a pretty way of putting it. I like how it jumps from thought to thought, but is still poetically put. Good job