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for An Untold Obsession: chapter 1

2/9/2006 c1 deletemyaccount2012
Short, again, but good. Update soon and please make it longer. PS: I have yet to update Forgotten Suicide but I posted another supernatural story if you want to check it out.
1/28/2006 c1 free-to-dream15
Hiya! lol...(kinda hyper right now cause I just had a soda!) Anyways, really good so far! I liked how he was confused as to how he cared even though he just met her...the only real CC I have is when you said "I just got a call from your school at my job" You might want to change "job" to "work" but that is up to you!

The other thing is why don't you combine this with the prologue...like not as the same chapter but as like one story called "An Untold Obsession" and have prologue marked as the first page...then they review..and click the button and the second page would be chapter one. but that is totally up to you! Just a friendly suggestion!

I'll be sure to tell people about it! (cause its awesome! lol) If you want you can check out my story twisted reality..that is if you have time or are bored or whatever...if you don't want to, that is totally fine. I understand! I have to leave but if I get sometime later I'll be sure to check out some of your other work!

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