for Not So Invincible Anymore2/4/2006 c1 the naked civil servant
you pretend to love when you feel alone
(and
that makes me happy
like nothing else does)
you pretend to love when you feel alone
(and
that makes me happy
like nothing else does)
1/29/2006 c1 
18bleed gilead
love love how you begin- the image of blood holding a smile in place. love "and i think it's my turn." i love "i'm drunk again and dancing in the rain". but i do think some of this is just slightly verbose- it could be a little more concentrated, a little tighter.
18bleed gileadlove love how you begin- the image of blood holding a smile in place. love "and i think it's my turn." i love "i'm drunk again and dancing in the rain". but i do think some of this is just slightly verbose- it could be a little more concentrated, a little tighter.
1/28/2006 c1 shatterdmirrorlaughingpieces-2 lazy 2 login
wow...this is incredible
a dark bruise blossoming on my foreheadfrom where I crashed back into reality
shit, that has to be my absolute FAVORITE line...iloveitiloveitiloveit. its just amazing. the intense sadness in this piece...wow. just frigginWOW.
wow...this is incredible
a dark bruise blossoming on my foreheadfrom where I crashed back into reality
shit, that has to be my absolute FAVORITE line...iloveitiloveitiloveit. its just amazing. the intense sadness in this piece...wow. just frigginWOW.
1/28/2006 c1 24frayedlifeforce
wow this is so emotional and powerful - i love the metaphor about the scars. the person in the poem had such a raw feeling to her - you really captured everything amazingly well.beautiful, inspiring work.
24frayedlifeforcewow this is so emotional and powerful - i love the metaphor about the scars. the person in the poem had such a raw feeling to her - you really captured everything amazingly well.beautiful, inspiring work.
1/28/2006 c1 37TheDevilsAngel09
wow...this is such an exstremely emotional poem, i can actually feel the emotion of the character throught the word, well that a given..lol..this piece is amazing, u shuld think about publishing it...im not joking..i think this is the best piece i have ever read, and i read alot of poetry. its just amazing. so powerful and strong, but also so fragile and scared...excellent..WOW!
37TheDevilsAngel09wow...this is such an exstremely emotional poem, i can actually feel the emotion of the character throught the word, well that a given..lol..this piece is amazing, u shuld think about publishing it...im not joking..i think this is the best piece i have ever read, and i read alot of poetry. its just amazing. so powerful and strong, but also so fragile and scared...excellent..WOW!