for The Dive11/2/2006 c1 
49ignominy
this is great. i love how detailed you are and i can see you meant the last line to be strong and it is. you should be very proud of this one.
49ignominythis is great. i love how detailed you are and i can see you meant the last line to be strong and it is. you should be very proud of this one.
10/9/2006 c1 14Kuzuki Sugimorii
Tension much? This is great. It shows the thoughts running through not just a swimmer's, but any athletes head before the big moment incredibly clearly. Nice work. I'll be watching for more from you.
14Kuzuki SugimoriiTension much? This is great. It shows the thoughts running through not just a swimmer's, but any athletes head before the big moment incredibly clearly. Nice work. I'll be watching for more from you.
10/8/2006 c1 xekax
ah not signed in. anyways i like it. thanks for all the reviews!
ah not signed in. anyways i like it. thanks for all the reviews!
2/5/2006 c1 8shining gem
Thank you for your kind words in your reviews! I really liked your wording, and how real this was. Once in a while your timing seemed a little off, but that could've been on purpose. Keep up the good work!
8shining gemThank you for your kind words in your reviews! I really liked your wording, and how real this was. Once in a while your timing seemed a little off, but that could've been on purpose. Keep up the good work!
2/4/2006 c1 2lirantha
You capture the tension perfectly - thoughts racing faster than the body could ever manage - up to the very end where those last five lines (6, 6, 5, 5, and 8 syllables) grow shorter, like shallow breaths before the dive and the splash. You can almost hear the water in the s of "immersed" and the dulling of all above-surface sounds in all the n's and m's. Beautiful. =) (P.S. And thanks for the review!)
2liranthaYou capture the tension perfectly - thoughts racing faster than the body could ever manage - up to the very end where those last five lines (6, 6, 5, 5, and 8 syllables) grow shorter, like shallow breaths before the dive and the splash. You can almost hear the water in the s of "immersed" and the dulling of all above-surface sounds in all the n's and m's. Beautiful. =) (P.S. And thanks for the review!)
2/4/2006 c1 56felicia13
Oh, nice! I like this one. The vivid images compliment the tense excitement of the race.
"And I am immersed in water." Awesome! Keep up the awesome stuff!
Thanks for the review! I really like the Silver Saline Anthology . . . Thanks bunches for your kind comments!
May inpsiration never leave you wanting!
all my love,felicia
56felicia13Oh, nice! I like this one. The vivid images compliment the tense excitement of the race.
"And I am immersed in water." Awesome! Keep up the awesome stuff!
Thanks for the review! I really like the Silver Saline Anthology . . . Thanks bunches for your kind comments!
May inpsiration never leave you wanting!
all my love,felicia
1/28/2006 c1 16brokendreams21
Awesome poem! I know exactly how it feels! (I used to swim competitively too!) You describe the feelings to well and this is written so smartly! I love it! It sends my heart racing! Great job!
16brokendreams21Awesome poem! I know exactly how it feels! (I used to swim competitively too!) You describe the feelings to well and this is written so smartly! I love it! It sends my heart racing! Great job!
1/28/2006 c1 92q is for quirks
oh, that was cool. good formatting. you could really see this one. good job.
92q is for quirksoh, that was cool. good formatting. you could really see this one. good job.