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for It was never said aloud

8/6/2006 c1 28TinuvielDork
This is beautiful. I love it. So sad, so heartbreaking, yet so true. I like the way you interdisperse the words we say out loud with the words inside our head. How they're so paradoxical, but we can just never find the right way to say it out loud. Make it certain. You also allow the reader to know what is happening to cause the poem to be written without explicitly saying what it is. This poem is fantastic.

Much love...TinuvielDork
1/30/2006 c1 5LT Sawbones
Wow, that was so good! It's like, exactly how I'm feeling right now and you totally captured all the emotions. Very good job!
1/29/2006 c1 11Veronica Delaney
i really like the unsaid phrases in the parenthesis...it really portrays how we go on like its okay, but there's more undernearth the surface.

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