for mistletoe7/11/2006 c1 
230lovelikeamixtape
this is both well-thought-out & emotional at the same time, which marks a really good piece in my mind. it has some really clever lines- such as "and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream". really good job.
230lovelikeamixtapethis is both well-thought-out & emotional at the same time, which marks a really good piece in my mind. it has some really clever lines- such as "and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream". really good job.
5/4/2006 c1 211avani.awakening
Now this one sounds more personal, with a bit of added imagery for flavor. If you took it away, what would be left?
211avani.awakeningNow this one sounds more personal, with a bit of added imagery for flavor. If you took it away, what would be left?
3/28/2006 c1 the naked civil servant
why does everyone write sex so stupendously? it's really horrifically unfair. i adore every ounce & mushroom in this poem, leaves me licking my lips & feeling smilingguilty of all the weight i must be putting on with all this eyeliner love.
why does everyone write sex so stupendously? it's really horrifically unfair. i adore every ounce & mushroom in this poem, leaves me licking my lips & feeling smilingguilty of all the weight i must be putting on with all this eyeliner love.
2/19/2006 c1 katt's got your tongue
beautiful, absoloutely brilliant! i love the last line of the first stanza especially, but the whole poem is truly a wonderful piece of word.
+faves
beautiful, absoloutely brilliant! i love the last line of the first stanza especially, but the whole poem is truly a wonderful piece of word.
+faves
2/5/2006 c1 50CalypsoDreaming
I like this. It's somewhat hypnotic and sucks you in.I love the beginning, especially the line '(and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream', and I love the way you use an open bracket and don't close it, giving the impression of open-endedness (is that even a word?).The line that I love most of all is: '(and you only love me when i’m not there.) this isthe aftermath of you&me.'Please keep writing.
50CalypsoDreamingI like this. It's somewhat hypnotic and sucks you in.I love the beginning, especially the line '(and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream', and I love the way you use an open bracket and don't close it, giving the impression of open-endedness (is that even a word?).The line that I love most of all is: '(and you only love me when i’m not there.) this isthe aftermath of you&me.'Please keep writing.
2/2/2006 c1 69mostly water
"i hate noticing you, reddamp sleevesand clutching holly leaves (and you a holly chess-piece, and i’d havewilling been your ebony, the bishop the white to your black(and together we were everywhere and everything, i wasthe queen for a king)"
Oh, god. This rings so true and real with me it hurts. "Reddamp sleeves" "and you a holly chess-piece". It's funny, because, about the same person this makes me think of, I wrote a poem using the chess pieces idea too. I don't know what it is that describes it so well in an ebony figurine...but it's beautiful, anyway, beautiful, and spewing out words I feel I've choked back too long. Congratulations. x
69mostly water"i hate noticing you, reddamp sleevesand clutching holly leaves (and you a holly chess-piece, and i’d havewilling been your ebony, the bishop the white to your black(and together we were everywhere and everything, i wasthe queen for a king)"
Oh, god. This rings so true and real with me it hurts. "Reddamp sleeves" "and you a holly chess-piece". It's funny, because, about the same person this makes me think of, I wrote a poem using the chess pieces idea too. I don't know what it is that describes it so well in an ebony figurine...but it's beautiful, anyway, beautiful, and spewing out words I feel I've choked back too long. Congratulations. x
1/30/2006 c1 73Jezsh
this is gorgeous. I love 'and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream' and 'youwho had an apocalypse etched in your bones'. Amazing lines! Fantastic tone, really like it.
73Jezshthis is gorgeous. I love 'and if mouths are gashes your wrists scream' and 'youwho had an apocalypse etched in your bones'. Amazing lines! Fantastic tone, really like it.
1/29/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Excellent, you once again blend in so many divergent aspects that converge so well. Very unique lines and word twists throughout. Wonderful, once again. Good write.
879Moondog DozierExcellent, you once again blend in so many divergent aspects that converge so well. Very unique lines and word twists throughout. Wonderful, once again. Good write.
1/29/2006 c1 33mint cookie
Beautiful. A bit confusing, but... you know, I think it just adds to the mystery of this piece. Morbid... in an odd, rustic sort of way. Yeah. Well, what I'm trying to say is... nice job.
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33mint cookieBeautiful. A bit confusing, but... you know, I think it just adds to the mystery of this piece. Morbid... in an odd, rustic sort of way. Yeah. Well, what I'm trying to say is... nice job.
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1/29/2006 c1 5tomboypride
Wow. Maybe it's just me, but this seems deep. Or perhaps, you know something I don't Either way, it spoke to me in my own personal way about my current relationship. "The carnage of you and me." I also love the first stanza. I love the whole thing!
5tomboyprideWow. Maybe it's just me, but this seems deep. Or perhaps, you know something I don't Either way, it spoke to me in my own personal way about my current relationship. "The carnage of you and me." I also love the first stanza. I love the whole thing!