for He Hates Me, He Hates Me NOT?2/4/2006 c2 
23Nut
Lovely chapter! And good editing of the previous chapter, the ending is a lot better =). And I really liked the ending of this one too haha
23NutLovely chapter! And good editing of the previous chapter, the ending is a lot better =). And I really liked the ending of this one too haha
1/31/2006 c1 2Kohnitz
Loving it so far! Write more! please read and review one of my stories! Thanks.xox
2KohnitzLoving it so far! Write more! please read and review one of my stories! Thanks.xox
1/31/2006 c1 anonymous
love it so far! awesome work.
update soon!
love it so far! awesome work.
update soon!
1/31/2006 c1 dorydafish
hehehe
FUNNY!
I like jackass. well t the mo seeing as we dont no his name yet. I hope he has a cool name.
She has a crush on the no brain guy? hehe i hope thats all about to change. Plus i lik ethe sound of the jackass way beter. LOL!
plus he kinda maybeish tried to say sorry fro throwin gthe frisbe at her. LOL!
Im assuming that they are gonna end up going to the same skl? BTW wat grade are these guys in. Is it the same as the girls? Wat grade is that?
Cant wait for the update of this story.
Will be waiting
DDF X
hehehe
FUNNY!
I like jackass. well t the mo seeing as we dont no his name yet. I hope he has a cool name.
She has a crush on the no brain guy? hehe i hope thats all about to change. Plus i lik ethe sound of the jackass way beter. LOL!
plus he kinda maybeish tried to say sorry fro throwin gthe frisbe at her. LOL!
Im assuming that they are gonna end up going to the same skl? BTW wat grade are these guys in. Is it the same as the girls? Wat grade is that?
Cant wait for the update of this story.
Will be waiting
DDF X
1/31/2006 c1 5ShadowYellowEyes
Ah, dramatic irony. We know that he'll end up at her school just because she said it. Hmm...
I really like the voice of Kris. Very clear and distinct, and I can understand, being mean to hot guys... -_- But I guess I really did not catch it clearly enough: the boy that hit her with the frisbee is not the same boy that Marissa had been oggling? Maybe just the word "different" would help... This is just for later work, just so that you know.
And, nit-picky as I am, to die for should be to-die-for (I'm such a nit-picky person... Sorry).
Expectantly waiting for the next chapter.
Shadow
5ShadowYellowEyesAh, dramatic irony. We know that he'll end up at her school just because she said it. Hmm...
I really like the voice of Kris. Very clear and distinct, and I can understand, being mean to hot guys... -_- But I guess I really did not catch it clearly enough: the boy that hit her with the frisbee is not the same boy that Marissa had been oggling? Maybe just the word "different" would help... This is just for later work, just so that you know.
And, nit-picky as I am, to die for should be to-die-for (I'm such a nit-picky person... Sorry).
Expectantly waiting for the next chapter.
Shadow
1/31/2006 c1 23Nut
Good start to a new story. But if I were you, I'd take out that last paragraph because it makes it really obvious that he's going to be going to her school and she'll see him again (unless you don't intend to bring him back into the story . . . but I doubt that's the case). So yeah, just take out the last paragraph so that it'll add more surprise to the next time that we see him. Good work =)
23NutGood start to a new story. But if I were you, I'd take out that last paragraph because it makes it really obvious that he's going to be going to her school and she'll see him again (unless you don't intend to bring him back into the story . . . but I doubt that's the case). So yeah, just take out the last paragraph so that it'll add more surprise to the next time that we see him. Good work =)
1/31/2006 c1 Pixie
Good for starters. It did pluck my interest. ..so continue! Can't wait!
Good for starters. It did pluck my interest. ..so continue! Can't wait!
1/31/2006 c1 sharp-tounged
Yes, abs to die for, a story to die for!update soon.
Yes, abs to die for, a story to die for!update soon.