for The First One to Leave4/6/2006 c1 
31Holly Rose E
the second stanza seems to build into a crescendo, making it that much more powerful. wonderful.
31Holly Rose Ethe second stanza seems to build into a crescendo, making it that much more powerful. wonderful.
2/9/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Wonderful explanation. The voice seems to describe a steady course. Good job.
879Moondog DozierWonderful explanation. The voice seems to describe a steady course. Good job.
2/9/2006 c1 104FunkyFlower
great show of obstinance. i like the first verse...touching and kinda sad. great job,
~mez~
104FunkyFlowergreat show of obstinance. i like the first verse...touching and kinda sad. great job,
~mez~
2/8/2006 c1 5Eien no Ryu
Heh, and Kazi thought his works were short.But as any good author knows, length is unimportant, so long as you say what you will in a strong and unfaltering voice.
And you've done that quite well.
5Eien no RyuHeh, and Kazi thought his works were short.But as any good author knows, length is unimportant, so long as you say what you will in a strong and unfaltering voice.
And you've done that quite well.
2/1/2006 c1 19Pink Sparrow
Very good. I love the last line and the first line the best. I like the length, even though its short it's still powerful. Nice work!
19Pink SparrowVery good. I love the last line and the first line the best. I like the length, even though its short it's still powerful. Nice work!