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9/1/2006 c1 jennilyn.rose
Wow.

It tells a lot in only two stanzas.
4/6/2006 c1 31Holly Rose E
the second stanza seems to build into a crescendo, making it that much more powerful. wonderful.
3/5/2006 c1 21lordelfy
yay i like this great job!
2/9/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Wonderful explanation. The voice seems to describe a steady course. Good job.
2/9/2006 c1 104FunkyFlower
great show of obstinance. i like the first verse...touching and kinda sad. great job,

~mez~
2/8/2006 c1 5Eien no Ryu
Heh, and Kazi thought his works were short.But as any good author knows, length is unimportant, so long as you say what you will in a strong and unfaltering voice.

And you've done that quite well.
2/6/2006 c1 241Werewolf Nighteyes
Short, but it gets the point across. Nicely done.
2/2/2006 c1 Needa S
Very good, nicely done.
2/1/2006 c1 19Pink Sparrow
Very good. I love the last line and the first line the best. I like the length, even though its short it's still powerful. Nice work!

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