for Maia's Love11/6/2006 c3 redreflection026
Hey, this story definately captured my attention. Keep writing because i want to know what happens next!
Hey, this story definately captured my attention. Keep writing because i want to know what happens next!
2/15/2006 c1 
6Den Den
Very cool story, I think the only thing is, that you should show not tell, be more descriptive like walking into hte kitchen, you should put "I was" and define that, but thats just me! ^.^, btw this is a good story whoever posted before I did probably doesn't understand what an exposition is.
6Den DenVery cool story, I think the only thing is, that you should show not tell, be more descriptive like walking into hte kitchen, you should put "I was" and define that, but thats just me! ^.^, btw this is a good story whoever posted before I did probably doesn't understand what an exposition is.
2/12/2006 c2 NoComment
Dumb. Dumb. Dumb. Dumb. This story is just plain dumb. It has no plot line, the characters and story lines are everywhere and the grammar is present-day. If your going to write a story like this, in the time/era that you wrote it, you need to catch up on the language of the time. Sorry but this story was just horrible.
Dumb. Dumb. Dumb. Dumb. This story is just plain dumb. It has no plot line, the characters and story lines are everywhere and the grammar is present-day. If your going to write a story like this, in the time/era that you wrote it, you need to catch up on the language of the time. Sorry but this story was just horrible.
2/2/2006 c2 1The Escapist
Oh sorry! I forgot that I left my flashdrive at my dad's. I'll get it back tomorrow. Sorry!
1The EscapistOh sorry! I forgot that I left my flashdrive at my dad's. I'll get it back tomorrow. Sorry!
2/1/2006 c2 2Queen of Boredom
Hello. This is quite an interesting story. I am a little confused but thats just me...and about Stephan..yeah..I'm not good at love parts...hehe...soo..like..thank for your review..and keep writing.
2Queen of BoredomHello. This is quite an interesting story. I am a little confused but thats just me...and about Stephan..yeah..I'm not good at love parts...hehe...soo..like..thank for your review..and keep writing.