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5Deliah Minicet
wow. that was pretty awesome. such a different style from the stories you're writing right now...i really liked it!
5Deliah Minicetwow. that was pretty awesome. such a different style from the stories you're writing right now...i really liked it!
2/1/2006 c1 1Marie Ellen
You're very talented. "Love Songs from Layla" is a well-contained, interesting, and has beautiful, true imagery.
I wonder who her list of people are. Siblings, relatives, friends? What are their significance?
This isn't a short story, per se. I don't know what to call it. Perhaps if it were all about Layla, it could function more as a story. It is almost a list, and a yet it is a deep, touching, very recognizable list full of people that I may know, or may want to know.
1Marie EllenYou're very talented. "Love Songs from Layla" is a well-contained, interesting, and has beautiful, true imagery.
I wonder who her list of people are. Siblings, relatives, friends? What are their significance?
This isn't a short story, per se. I don't know what to call it. Perhaps if it were all about Layla, it could function more as a story. It is almost a list, and a yet it is a deep, touching, very recognizable list full of people that I may know, or may want to know.
2/1/2006 c1 20Pheobe Meryll
This was an absolutely beautiful little sketch. The ending was really breathtaking in its ...well, its depth.I loved the paragraph about pygmalion and galetea. It brought perpective to your theme, and it was an original idea...galatea being actually a manifestation of what pygmalion wants to be.
and I love the part about how 'layla sees the world but never seizes it.' there is such a fine line between the two, that onlookers so often don't realize is there. those of us who are like layla (who see the world 'like a baby, unpretentious and unforgettable') see the difference so clearly, though. The world is wonderous, even in its vices. But I am merely expanding on what you wrote so perfectly.
I am putting this on my favorites list...wonderful peice. keep writing!
20Pheobe MeryllThis was an absolutely beautiful little sketch. The ending was really breathtaking in its ...well, its depth.I loved the paragraph about pygmalion and galetea. It brought perpective to your theme, and it was an original idea...galatea being actually a manifestation of what pygmalion wants to be.
and I love the part about how 'layla sees the world but never seizes it.' there is such a fine line between the two, that onlookers so often don't realize is there. those of us who are like layla (who see the world 'like a baby, unpretentious and unforgettable') see the difference so clearly, though. The world is wonderous, even in its vices. But I am merely expanding on what you wrote so perfectly.
I am putting this on my favorites list...wonderful peice. keep writing!