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10/8/2009 c1 17P.A.W.07
Egh ... I didn't see that last line coming, especially with that title. XD
9/27/2006 c1 61the.pink.life
Wow, the contrast in this poem is really shocking. I think it's fun that you started all three lines with an "A." I don't know if that was intentional, but I just thought it was fun. I really do love this. Amazing work. I think I'm favoriting you and this poem. Keep writing! :)
2/20/2006 c1 19SilverRain1011
Kinda threw me a surprise at the ending. But I like that. I like to have an author surprise me at the end of a poem or story. It keeps the reader's attention. Bravo!
2/5/2006 c1 879Moondog Dozier
Another great contrast. Lures the reader in then drops the last line on them.
2/4/2006 c1 64Samara-chan
HA! Surprise ending; a morbid, yet tranquil haiku. Love it!
2/4/2006 c1 48Vyvyan
Oh...that lat line...nicely done. It really leaves me wanting more and sets my mind a spining.
2/4/2006 c1 216ygg
Nice one! Very haunting last line.. kinda reflects the yin and yang of life.
2/4/2006 c1 49Toxic.Industrial.Waste
dark, mysterious, I love it.

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2/4/2006 c1 123Black and White Dreams
nicely done! i like it a lot!
2/3/2006 c1 25cornered.sensations
lovely images created here, so pretty. Keep writing!

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