for Music12/27/2006 c1 
495mate.feed.kill.repeat
Wow.
I thought when I clicked the thing that I was going to get another pathetic "pity me" poem (found way too many of them already) but I was really happy when I found out that I had FINALLY found one that was worth reading!
So cheers for a strong, moving piece.
"Dance through a world of music
move to the rhythms
Spin, dip
Bend, slip"
^ Strong. Fresh. Metaphoric. Abstract.
Not too many times you can find something that's so strong and to the point that it's abstract but it blends so perfectly its ... indescribable.
And yes, silver is a great color.
-stixerz-
495mate.feed.kill.repeatWow.
I thought when I clicked the thing that I was going to get another pathetic "pity me" poem (found way too many of them already) but I was really happy when I found out that I had FINALLY found one that was worth reading!
So cheers for a strong, moving piece.
"Dance through a world of music
move to the rhythms
Spin, dip
Bend, slip"
^ Strong. Fresh. Metaphoric. Abstract.
Not too many times you can find something that's so strong and to the point that it's abstract but it blends so perfectly its ... indescribable.
And yes, silver is a great color.
-stixerz-
5/7/2006 c1 34Lady of Spring Rain
Incredibal poem. I love the feel of it. Real smooth and watery feeling...oh and thank you for reviewing my story...er poem :)
34Lady of Spring RainIncredibal poem. I love the feel of it. Real smooth and watery feeling...oh and thank you for reviewing my story...er poem :)
5/3/2006 c1 54SirenThird
The first half of the poem doesn't quite seem to match the second half. (Half to be taken literally, as in the middle of the third stanza)That being said, once I got to the second half I really liked this poem and the contrast, even if it makes the poem seem a bit stilted, makes it sort of like actual music. The first half is sort of slow, with little rhyming and the second fast is quick with a sort of almost bouncy rhyme scheme.The first stanza feels a bit abrupt, and I wonder why there is a comma after "Violent" if it is a line by itself. I tried reading it slower and it seemed to work better. Maybe there's a way for you to show that it should be read slowly?
Right, so I'm going to stop rattling on now./flees
54SirenThirdThe first half of the poem doesn't quite seem to match the second half. (Half to be taken literally, as in the middle of the third stanza)That being said, once I got to the second half I really liked this poem and the contrast, even if it makes the poem seem a bit stilted, makes it sort of like actual music. The first half is sort of slow, with little rhyming and the second fast is quick with a sort of almost bouncy rhyme scheme.The first stanza feels a bit abrupt, and I wonder why there is a comma after "Violent" if it is a line by itself. I tried reading it slower and it seemed to work better. Maybe there's a way for you to show that it should be read slowly?
Right, so I'm going to stop rattling on now./flees
4/13/2006 c1 10lady moonlight
I like this one because I really,really, really love music. This peom move throught its stage's like water, smooth and sub dued. I will say this was amazing and will move on to another peom.
10lady moonlightI like this one because I really,really, really love music. This peom move throught its stage's like water, smooth and sub dued. I will say this was amazing and will move on to another peom.
4/9/2006 c1 34Smoky Bear
great flow in this, and it relects the spectacular concept... music is the essence of life and it's captured beautifully here.
34Smoky Beargreat flow in this, and it relects the spectacular concept... music is the essence of life and it's captured beautifully here.
4/8/2006 c1 168SeaVoi
The rhythm of this really adds, lol, you know this poem makes me want to jump out of my seat dance around and wait for someone to go “what the…” lol.
168SeaVoiThe rhythm of this really adds, lol, you know this poem makes me want to jump out of my seat dance around and wait for someone to go “what the…” lol.
4/6/2006 c1 polka dots and addictions
I really like the inconsistancies of this poem (the verses). "Dance through a world of music"...thatline is brilliant. keep writing!
_beXie_
I really like the inconsistancies of this poem (the verses). "Dance through a world of music"...thatline is brilliant. keep writing!
_beXie_
4/5/2006 c1 16Black Star4
...I can't help wishing there were music to this, on Fp.net. It would be an awesome song. It's not my style, but that's why I like it. It's different, original, if you will. And oh so true when you read it without trying to pick it apart. 5 of 5 *'s girl. (BYTW: Read your profile. You and I seem to have the same policy on reviews. ^_~)
16Black Star4...I can't help wishing there were music to this, on Fp.net. It would be an awesome song. It's not my style, but that's why I like it. It's different, original, if you will. And oh so true when you read it without trying to pick it apart. 5 of 5 *'s girl. (BYTW: Read your profile. You and I seem to have the same policy on reviews. ^_~)
3/26/2006 c1 67A Midsummer Nights Sacrifice
I really like thsi the only thing is the rhym sceme doesn't really match... But i wuffle the poem anywhay
67A Midsummer Nights SacrificeI really like thsi the only thing is the rhym sceme doesn't really match... But i wuffle the poem anywhay
3/24/2006 c1 8Kitsune gone insane
me like! i play the clarinet and i am learning mellophone (marching french horn)anyway! nice poem! thanks for reviewing mine..
8Kitsune gone insaneme like! i play the clarinet and i am learning mellophone (marching french horn)anyway! nice poem! thanks for reviewing mine..
3/23/2006 c1 8bemused scribbler
ok, i really like this one. the end is so perfect, it has a nice flow to it. i also enjoyed the part about water, i think it works really well. ^_^
8bemused scribblerok, i really like this one. the end is so perfect, it has a nice flow to it. i also enjoyed the part about water, i think it works really well. ^_^
3/20/2006 c1 219Matthew James Current
Lovely work, I have a couple pieces on music myself. I love how you addressed and captured both ends of the spectrum very well and yet with so few words. You are officially on my favorite authors list.
219Matthew James CurrentLovely work, I have a couple pieces on music myself. I love how you addressed and captured both ends of the spectrum very well and yet with so few words. You are officially on my favorite authors list.
3/12/2006 c1 GetBehindMeSatan
Oh, this is lovely! I'm in love with all of the poem's about music- the ones I've read can always capture the feeling of music so beautifully, and your's is no exeption.
Eyah. I particularly love the verse that begins with 'Dance through a world of music'.
Though, the second verse, I didn't quite get it. -.-
What do you mean by "Some of it the smooth fall" ? It was slightly confusing- to me anyway, but it might be because I'm in my dense mood. ^_^; I apoligise if it makes sense to everyone but me, heh.
...Anyway, your writing is beautiful, and please, do continue.
Best of Luck in all of your writing,
Channa
Oh, this is lovely! I'm in love with all of the poem's about music- the ones I've read can always capture the feeling of music so beautifully, and your's is no exeption.
Eyah. I particularly love the verse that begins with 'Dance through a world of music'.
Though, the second verse, I didn't quite get it. -.-
What do you mean by "Some of it the smooth fall" ? It was slightly confusing- to me anyway, but it might be because I'm in my dense mood. ^_^; I apoligise if it makes sense to everyone but me, heh.
...Anyway, your writing is beautiful, and please, do continue.
Best of Luck in all of your writing,
Channa