for Listless10/1/2007 c1 
24The FiboNACHI Sequence
*tilts head to the side*
I have always wondered about this one. It seems to mark a turning point of sorts.
It's a very well written poem (and no I will not point out 'dieing' is misspelled... whoops *grins*)
I like it. I don't know why. But I do.
Ciao
Nach
24The FiboNACHI Sequence*tilts head to the side*
I have always wondered about this one. It seems to mark a turning point of sorts.
It's a very well written poem (and no I will not point out 'dieing' is misspelled... whoops *grins*)
I like it. I don't know why. But I do.
Ciao
Nach
4/9/2006 c1 1rainbowxcupcake
This was well written, and I loved the format you used, with the one word starting off each part. It felt very dramatic, and that made it sound really poetic. I did get confused with the one line... the "Why not just die?" that is between the 4th and 5th parts. It seems randomly placed. Otherwise, It was very nice. :)
1rainbowxcupcakeThis was well written, and I loved the format you used, with the one word starting off each part. It felt very dramatic, and that made it sound really poetic. I did get confused with the one line... the "Why not just die?" that is between the 4th and 5th parts. It seems randomly placed. Otherwise, It was very nice. :)
4/7/2006 c1 19Jason J. Ross
I love the way this is arranged. Very melodic, musical! You capture the emotion very well. Keep writing!
19Jason J. RossI love the way this is arranged. Very melodic, musical! You capture the emotion very well. Keep writing!
3/24/2006 c1 4Shitsuren
.. this was too good .. serious, you're very talented *smile* no lies .. one word and then you describe everything so well .. really powerful, you can feel the emotion ..
4Shitsuren.. this was too good .. serious, you're very talented *smile* no lies .. one word and then you describe everything so well .. really powerful, you can feel the emotion ..
3/22/2006 c1 21Phantoms-fallen-angel
Heya, wow, this poem was really cool - such a strange sense of rhyme. oh, and maggie? "Dieing?" DYING! *pouts* aww,, you know I love you to death... I loved the "loveless" verse... very nive and poetic. *sigh* another brilliant one! Cheers!
21Phantoms-fallen-angelHeya, wow, this poem was really cool - such a strange sense of rhyme. oh, and maggie? "Dieing?" DYING! *pouts* aww,, you know I love you to death... I loved the "loveless" verse... very nive and poetic. *sigh* another brilliant one! Cheers!
3/12/2006 c1 Galadh Niniel
Powerful poem, the short lines and the parallel structure combined with climax make it really effective, for instance the way you start each stanza with an adjective or participle which become more and more intense, from "listless" to "dying". Really well done.
Powerful poem, the short lines and the parallel structure combined with climax make it really effective, for instance the way you start each stanza with an adjective or participle which become more and more intense, from "listless" to "dying". Really well done.
3/10/2006 c1 11les petits bateaux
Intriguing little poem, you have here. I love the whole concept and your imagery was just intense. Good work. :)
11les petits bateauxIntriguing little poem, you have here. I love the whole concept and your imagery was just intense. Good work. :)
2/22/2006 c1 14Mr. Raven
well, its a great poem, found only one problem with it, and it is a spelling mistake. (but who likes to nitpick?)
it's raw and chilly.
14Mr. Ravenwell, its a great poem, found only one problem with it, and it is a spelling mistake. (but who likes to nitpick?)
it's raw and chilly.
2/8/2006 c1 12Vas Da Gama
Nice poem. Really deep.I liked the way you used the one wordbegining to each stanza. Gave a nice feel to the poem.
Thanks for reviewing my stuff.
12Vas Da GamaNice poem. Really deep.I liked the way you used the one wordbegining to each stanza. Gave a nice feel to the poem.
Thanks for reviewing my stuff.
2/6/2006 c1 20Ode to Maddness
deep, very deep. life will turn around, it always does. stupid eratic thing it is, unreliable that life thing. well written anyway.
-stay insane-
20Ode to Maddnessdeep, very deep. life will turn around, it always does. stupid eratic thing it is, unreliable that life thing. well written anyway.
-stay insane-
2/6/2006 c1 24frayedlifeforce
oh i know that feeling. that feeling where you don't want to be where you are right now, and you can't think of a time when you want to be - listless. exactly right. anyway nice write with good wording and description. you wrote this well.~lionessrampant
24frayedlifeforceoh i know that feeling. that feeling where you don't want to be where you are right now, and you can't think of a time when you want to be - listless. exactly right. anyway nice write with good wording and description. you wrote this well.~lionessrampant