
9/30/2006 c1
6Polished Gem
Cute. Kind of reminded me of the "my poor meatball" song. *chuckles* Keep up the writing.~Polished GemBtw, thx for the R&R!

Cute. Kind of reminded me of the "my poor meatball" song. *chuckles* Keep up the writing.~Polished GemBtw, thx for the R&R!
8/25/2006 c1
5jointedlegs
This poem is really cute! kinda like a limerick...so I'm guessing the meaning is just surface value rite? This keeps it comical, short, and sweet anyways. :)

This poem is really cute! kinda like a limerick...so I'm guessing the meaning is just surface value rite? This keeps it comical, short, and sweet anyways. :)
7/14/2006 c1
18Plinky
Very random... I like the idea of the pearl.
A couple of the rhymes seem as if you've chosen those words because they rhyme, rather than because they are the words you want, but it's very cute.
Keep writing!

Very random... I like the idea of the pearl.
A couple of the rhymes seem as if you've chosen those words because they rhyme, rather than because they are the words you want, but it's very cute.
Keep writing!
3/11/2006 c1
40sweetxinsincerity
this is a good piece, especially since it's only your second try at poetry. there are some parts where the rhyming seems a little forced, but other that i like it.

this is a good piece, especially since it's only your second try at poetry. there are some parts where the rhyming seems a little forced, but other that i like it.