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11/14/2006 c1 65Nemonus
AW! It's so cute...lol, I know a girl who this poem would fit very well. It is an observation of a sort. The last stanza changes in rhythm and tone, but that makes the whole poem funny, and kinda cute and fuzzy in a dark and spiky way, like your title subjects. Hee. So if you think it is bad because it is simpler than the others, it is simpler but that works. The final line is a truth, but might desire a period to concrete it. It was the fourth stanza that I wasn't to fond of, what with the last line not being attached, and the repition occuring only there. Good work overall.

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