for Vice of Excess8/22/2006 c1 
1Dire Calamity
I get the image of an old white house with snow on the ground and wild flowers somehow growing with the first part. Then it seems to feel like the showing of some Mexican stuffies. And lastly, a time memorialized in stone for the last part?
If non of this is right, I shouldn't be reviewing your stuff, as I don't read the same things as you, and am horrible at following the meanings behind your writing-style.
1Dire CalamityI get the image of an old white house with snow on the ground and wild flowers somehow growing with the first part. Then it seems to feel like the showing of some Mexican stuffies. And lastly, a time memorialized in stone for the last part?
If non of this is right, I shouldn't be reviewing your stuff, as I don't read the same things as you, and am horrible at following the meanings behind your writing-style.
3/28/2006 c1 92q is for quirks
you have a unique way of writing. it's very creative. this poem created some very strong images. good job.
and also, thanks for the review.
92q is for quirksyou have a unique way of writing. it's very creative. this poem created some very strong images. good job.
and also, thanks for the review.
3/21/2006 c1 14Juni
One of the things I like about both this piece and "Elevator Tripping" is the way the words seem to flit across my mind leaving vague impressions, like a camera shutter clicking open and closed on different scenes. . . I don't exactly know what I got from this, but it makes me think, and I like that. It seemed almost frenzied, like a collage of images and words. Anyway, your style is very unique. . . interesting. : D
14JuniOne of the things I like about both this piece and "Elevator Tripping" is the way the words seem to flit across my mind leaving vague impressions, like a camera shutter clicking open and closed on different scenes. . . I don't exactly know what I got from this, but it makes me think, and I like that. It seemed almost frenzied, like a collage of images and words. Anyway, your style is very unique. . . interesting. : D
3/18/2006 c1 4run rabbit run
tha last bit was great! definitely a piece of brilliance herer!cheers -rabbit
4run rabbit runtha last bit was great! definitely a piece of brilliance herer!cheers -rabbit
2/18/2006 c1 237classic violet
"Nova Scotia" Hehe, I live in Nova Scoia. This poem is gorgeous. It's so colourful & full of so much. It dazzled me with it's beauty.
237classic violet"Nova Scotia" Hehe, I live in Nova Scoia. This poem is gorgeous. It's so colourful & full of so much. It dazzled me with it's beauty.
2/16/2006 c1 101frigg
I adore this piece, there is nothing more to say. Except that I'm favoriting this. My favorite part, if I had to pick a favorite is the first three lines of the first stanza.
Brava!
Junkd
101friggI adore this piece, there is nothing more to say. Except that I'm favoriting this. My favorite part, if I had to pick a favorite is the first three lines of the first stanza.
Brava!
Junkd
2/12/2006 c1 Little Couch
Amazing descriptions. So in depth and just...aweing descriptive words. Seriously, this is probably my favorite out of all the ones you wrote so far. Good job, fo'shung. =)
Amazing descriptions. So in depth and just...aweing descriptive words. Seriously, this is probably my favorite out of all the ones you wrote so far. Good job, fo'shung. =)
2/12/2006 c1 poo
amazing ;-;
~Sam, and you KNOW it, bitch.
amazing ;-;
~Sam, and you KNOW it, bitch.
2/11/2006 c1 hey maria
Not one of my favorites, but still pretty damn good. "like the August nine o’clock horizon, like the/waterfalls dropping/through into you." You've got talent.
Not one of my favorites, but still pretty damn good. "like the August nine o’clock horizon, like the/waterfalls dropping/through into you." You've got talent.
2/11/2006 c1 breezy nostrils
love love the physical imagery aspect of it. anyway, beautiful wording. keep on going!
love love the physical imagery aspect of it. anyway, beautiful wording. keep on going!