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12/15/2006 c1 65Continuation
It's disturbing how satisfying it is, isn't it?

This was well written; you could really tell that the speaker didn't really like this guy too much, to put it lightly. A little snippit of advice though: your commas aren't all placed properly. It's not a big deal, but when you read it with all the commas thrown in it disrupts the flow a little.

Good job overall though! You should write a prequel, just so we know what the actual problem was :D
9/26/2006 c1 5freddykre
That was great! You should defenitly do more stories, I really liked that. It was funny, and you express the way she feels really well. She did too, haha.

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