for Surprise, I do12/15/2006 c1 
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It's disturbing how satisfying it is, isn't it?
This was well written; you could really tell that the speaker didn't really like this guy too much, to put it lightly. A little snippit of advice though: your commas aren't all placed properly. It's not a big deal, but when you read it with all the commas thrown in it disrupts the flow a little.
Good job overall though! You should write a prequel, just so we know what the actual problem was :D
65ContinuationIt's disturbing how satisfying it is, isn't it?
This was well written; you could really tell that the speaker didn't really like this guy too much, to put it lightly. A little snippit of advice though: your commas aren't all placed properly. It's not a big deal, but when you read it with all the commas thrown in it disrupts the flow a little.
Good job overall though! You should write a prequel, just so we know what the actual problem was :D