for I'm Sick11/2/2006 c1 
5water lorelei
Sick... revolting... I love it!
The writing style is very nice, how you describe so physically the blood and gore and stuff that makes some people turn away from the moniter.
In other words, I liked it.
Farewell, (I usually give better reviews than this, sorry)
*silent darkness*
5water loreleiSick... revolting... I love it!
The writing style is very nice, how you describe so physically the blood and gore and stuff that makes some people turn away from the moniter.
In other words, I liked it.
Farewell, (I usually give better reviews than this, sorry)
*silent darkness*
3/29/2006 c1 linedstained frameless
It's freaky, and yet gives you that silent feel all around. You know how Japanese animes are right? Well, it's like that...Nice, disturbing, smart and plain genius...Nice job. Please keep reading my novel "Eve to Rise"
It's freaky, and yet gives you that silent feel all around. You know how Japanese animes are right? Well, it's like that...Nice, disturbing, smart and plain genius...Nice job. Please keep reading my novel "Eve to Rise"
2/25/2006 c1 11les petits bateaux
Intriguing concept, you have here. I felt that it was very interestingly written, with some perplex 'thing' going through the words. I don't quite know how to describe this emotion that I'm feeling after I finished reading this. Just...powerful.
11les petits bateauxIntriguing concept, you have here. I felt that it was very interestingly written, with some perplex 'thing' going through the words. I don't quite know how to describe this emotion that I'm feeling after I finished reading this. Just...powerful.
2/22/2006 c1 9violet bones
Wow, that was so graphic it almost made me bleed. But that's what i really liked about it. I could feel it.
Keep writing!
much loveVB
9violet bonesWow, that was so graphic it almost made me bleed. But that's what i really liked about it. I could feel it.
Keep writing!
much loveVB
2/22/2006 c1 Quaviver
Oh. Dear God of Hell and Heaven.
Er. You don't know me, but I noticed you while reading Xabelle's sweet "Excerpts from the Diary of a Dark Lord." So, in a happy Morgie-daze, I followed the link to your profile, and clicked randomly on the first story that came under my pointer-tip. Which was this.
You can imagine what I'm feeling right now.
In a word. This is _sicksickSICK_.
Since that's obviously the effect you're aiming for, that is a good thing. ^_^
I've read a lot of suicidal-gross stuff out there (mostly in poetry), and for the moment "I'm Sick" is at one of the top ten. It's not just the accuracy of detail (blood spilling in the brain, red bone and flesh) it's the incredible intensity of the un-feeling. He's yanking out his brain cells (something about cells always hits me hard), for god's sake, and he's blabbering about how pretty it all is, how amazing and shudder-lovelifying!
Whatever horror I feel about the content, I think that the story itself a great piece of work. Excellent in the style and execution. And the emotion you arouse in the reader (me, anyway) is extremely raw and strong.
A tiny thing struck me as off, though. The word "chap." It sounds so...cheerful British. I don't know. It just didn't sound right to me, personally. I feel the same way toward "bloke." (Take that comment with a grain of salt.)
Anyway, I'll definitely be looking at your other works at a later time.
Love, Quavi
Oh. Dear God of Hell and Heaven.
Er. You don't know me, but I noticed you while reading Xabelle's sweet "Excerpts from the Diary of a Dark Lord." So, in a happy Morgie-daze, I followed the link to your profile, and clicked randomly on the first story that came under my pointer-tip. Which was this.
You can imagine what I'm feeling right now.
In a word. This is _sicksickSICK_.
Since that's obviously the effect you're aiming for, that is a good thing. ^_^
I've read a lot of suicidal-gross stuff out there (mostly in poetry), and for the moment "I'm Sick" is at one of the top ten. It's not just the accuracy of detail (blood spilling in the brain, red bone and flesh) it's the incredible intensity of the un-feeling. He's yanking out his brain cells (something about cells always hits me hard), for god's sake, and he's blabbering about how pretty it all is, how amazing and shudder-lovelifying!
Whatever horror I feel about the content, I think that the story itself a great piece of work. Excellent in the style and execution. And the emotion you arouse in the reader (me, anyway) is extremely raw and strong.
A tiny thing struck me as off, though. The word "chap." It sounds so...cheerful British. I don't know. It just didn't sound right to me, personally. I feel the same way toward "bloke." (Take that comment with a grain of salt.)
Anyway, I'll definitely be looking at your other works at a later time.
Love, Quavi
2/18/2006 c1 47Yuffei
Notice it? It's hard to miss my friend. A powerful piece of work you have here. I enjoyed it... For lack of a better word... If you can really enjoy something like that, i mean. Either way, well done.
47YuffeiNotice it? It's hard to miss my friend. A powerful piece of work you have here. I enjoyed it... For lack of a better word... If you can really enjoy something like that, i mean. Either way, well done.
2/18/2006 c1 5Heatless Flame
Different, but interesting. So she feels no pain, but instead enjoys torturing herself. Read my story, Everlasting Battle!
5Heatless FlameDifferent, but interesting. So she feels no pain, but instead enjoys torturing herself. Read my story, Everlasting Battle!
2/17/2006 c1 31The Love Demi Goddess
Wow, this defiantly made me cringe. Great detail! It made me hurt -.- XD. Nice little piece, if you could call it 'nice..' maybe grotesque? ^_^ Great job.
Write hard, write long, write until dawn~ TLDG
31The Love Demi GoddessWow, this defiantly made me cringe. Great detail! It made me hurt -.- XD. Nice little piece, if you could call it 'nice..' maybe grotesque? ^_^ Great job.
Write hard, write long, write until dawn~ TLDG