for Immortal War8/13/2006 c41 
2CrystalEye
Wow! I forgot we wrote that many chapters! But then again, we did write some of them really short... @.@
Anyways, I need to add to the first book don't I?
2CrystalEyeWow! I forgot we wrote that many chapters! But then again, we did write some of them really short... @.@
Anyways, I need to add to the first book don't I?
3/21/2006 c44 Cherie
Great story, but it got a little confusing near the end. When did Laura and Captain(Jonathan) come back to Heather? I thought they left.Captain remembered he was Jonathan when he saw Mistress die right? I've got some other questions but I'll save them. There are a few typos, but over all its a good story. ^^
Great story, but it got a little confusing near the end. When did Laura and Captain(Jonathan) come back to Heather? I thought they left.Captain remembered he was Jonathan when he saw Mistress die right? I've got some other questions but I'll save them. There are a few typos, but over all its a good story. ^^
2/26/2006 c17 Cherie
Sand still isn't scary. The N/A has a lot of spelling mistakes. Other than that,it's a fun read.
Sand still isn't scary. The N/A has a lot of spelling mistakes. Other than that,it's a fun read.
2/26/2006 c13 Cherie
The story just keeps getting better. I can't wait till Santa Claus comes in and starts kicking butt. Oh I found a spelling mistake in this chapter. “Ho Chi Minh? Chop Sui? Tao Mein?” The Chinese man aasked me.too many a's in ask.
The story just keeps getting better. I can't wait till Santa Claus comes in and starts kicking butt. Oh I found a spelling mistake in this chapter. “Ho Chi Minh? Chop Sui? Tao Mein?” The Chinese man aasked me.too many a's in ask.
2/26/2006 c15 Four Minute Warning
HOMG I am so reporting you to the RSPCD!...The Royal Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Dragons, that is.
HOMG I am so reporting you to the RSPCD!...The Royal Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Dragons, that is.
2/18/2006 c6 Cherie
It's awesome. Good story so far. But I can't see how sand makes a very threatening weapon.
It's awesome. Good story so far. But I can't see how sand makes a very threatening weapon.