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6/21/2006 c1 123Black and White Dreams
This is so deep. Sad, but deep. I like it.

~Black and White Dreams~
5/1/2006 c1 11DreamWriterZ09
This was chilling...so sad..but so well-written!Well-done!
4/26/2006 c1 593Morwain
this was sad i liked it
4/22/2006 c1 44Maddie Fyrce
Omg,i totally know how that feels. Good poem. Loved it.
4/19/2006 c1 13Mortifer Amor Phasmus
Ah, I can almost taste the sadness. The poem is very vivid. Excellent work.
3/14/2006 c1 43je suis une pomme du terre
If you're not okay and he doesn't care... give him the boot, girl. ^.^ lol jk Wow, what can I say that I haven't already? Your stuff is just too good!
3/4/2006 c1 Benjamin - To Be Deleted
I can really relate to this. I have been through this a few times before-and the sad thing is its always with the same girl. I'm a fool for her... and I don't think she cares. Excellent work!
2/26/2006 c1 41But I Die Without You
Beautiful poem. It's a question everyone asks, and I loved the way you didn't hold anything back.
2/23/2006 c1 132mizu no kokoro
aww... i can feel the emotions well expressed in this~

keep writing!
2/20/2006 c1 140happypills03
my bf did that to me... he learned not to do it again..
2/19/2006 c1 14D'Haran Lord
I really enjoyed this poem, and i COMPLETELY understand what you are talking about. Only mine was 3 years. Wonderfully written, keep it up!
2/18/2006 c1 17Blinding Twilight
hey, nice poem, its really deep. I've been in the same situation, I went out with a girl for 11 months, we never had one fight and were so in love and then she just ending it with no warnings. I can really relate to this poem. Again nice work and keep writting
2/17/2006 c1 81Princess-anna57
Hi! ^_^

A good poem this is. A spelling mistake:

That your half way around the world... your should be you're (aw, just a little typo!)

About your review, the way I format my poems is the way I want to. I don't believe my poem is choppy, in fact, I think it flows really well. (I've written hundreds, if not thousands of poems in the past, and I know from experiementing). Also, the formatting fits perfectly with what the poem is saying. You need to read the poem out loud, one thing that a lot of people on this website just don't do. It flows perfectly off the tongue. I notice that you are a new user of this website, welcome welcome! Feel free to contact me if you would like any advice or such.

Yay, we have the same birthday! Happy birthday for next Saturday! ^_^

Bye now, and keep writing!

~Anna~ ^_^

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