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30Charmed.imsure-Always
Awwe! i got a really good picture with this one! bitter sweet, my favorite kind!
30Charmed.imsure-AlwaysAwwe! i got a really good picture with this one! bitter sweet, my favorite kind!
3/29/2006 c1 17incandescent.smiles
Hey! Sorry I haven't reviewed in awhile... some *stuff* has been going on lately. Thanks for your reviews, as always! :D.
Aw... this was sad. Cute and pretty, but sad. *heart breaks for the poor boy while attempting to smother him with hugs*. Tragically beautiful.
My favorite line was...
"Rememberance, but a dream of his touch"
I have no idea why. It just made the poem for me. *shrug*. I also liked the ending line, where you just used a comma instead of a conjunction. It made it a teeny bit jarring, so you're instantly feeling sorry for him.
Anywho, I must go. Loved it as usual.
~Leila*
17incandescent.smilesHey! Sorry I haven't reviewed in awhile... some *stuff* has been going on lately. Thanks for your reviews, as always! :D.
Aw... this was sad. Cute and pretty, but sad. *heart breaks for the poor boy while attempting to smother him with hugs*. Tragically beautiful.
My favorite line was...
"Rememberance, but a dream of his touch"
I have no idea why. It just made the poem for me. *shrug*. I also liked the ending line, where you just used a comma instead of a conjunction. It made it a teeny bit jarring, so you're instantly feeling sorry for him.
Anywho, I must go. Loved it as usual.
~Leila*
2/28/2006 c1 14method acting
Woah. All right, see...I went to Ireland and met this boy. Blah blah, I've changed and I loved him. Whatever. So, anyways, I've been writing constantly about him (I'm working on a full sotry right now) and our meeting but I never once considered it from his view. This piece really does that for me. (See, because shortly after we met, I left back to my homeland, mile and miles and miles away. Correlates very well with your piece, eh?) So...yes. Nice pice. Some of the Godly mentionings seemed out of place, and bits were choppy, but aside form that very cool descriptions. And I do mean cool. Like, easy breezey. You know? Flowing in an awkward way, edfinatly. It would have flowed amazingly if not for some lines that mussed with it. In any case, nice piece. Thanks for sharing.
14method actingWoah. All right, see...I went to Ireland and met this boy. Blah blah, I've changed and I loved him. Whatever. So, anyways, I've been writing constantly about him (I'm working on a full sotry right now) and our meeting but I never once considered it from his view. This piece really does that for me. (See, because shortly after we met, I left back to my homeland, mile and miles and miles away. Correlates very well with your piece, eh?) So...yes. Nice pice. Some of the Godly mentionings seemed out of place, and bits were choppy, but aside form that very cool descriptions. And I do mean cool. Like, easy breezey. You know? Flowing in an awkward way, edfinatly. It would have flowed amazingly if not for some lines that mussed with it. In any case, nice piece. Thanks for sharing.
2/25/2006 c1 132mizu no kokoro
wow... it was like a dream... too good to be true~ lovely work
keep writing!
132mizu no kokorowow... it was like a dream... too good to be true~ lovely work
keep writing!
2/21/2006 c1 60Rosanna28
Wauw Alex! This is beyond beautiful. I loved the line 'Out of order, but everything so right'. This is such a great poem, you did very well!
Much love, Rosanna.
60Rosanna28Wauw Alex! This is beyond beautiful. I loved the line 'Out of order, but everything so right'. This is such a great poem, you did very well!
Much love, Rosanna.
2/20/2006 c1 124in theory
Mm...unlimbering, so entrancing; I get images of just after sex imagery, disentangling after the act etc (not to be graphic) it's just the kind of sensuality you feel after it. And it feels delicate, raw, with a natural grace. Pretty.
124in theoryMm...unlimbering, so entrancing; I get images of just after sex imagery, disentangling after the act etc (not to be graphic) it's just the kind of sensuality you feel after it. And it feels delicate, raw, with a natural grace. Pretty.
2/19/2006 c1 298Moon-Chaser
Beautiful. The way that you use words is always wonderful. I like the last two stanzas.
Keep it up.
298Moon-ChaserBeautiful. The way that you use words is always wonderful. I like the last two stanzas.
Keep it up.
2/19/2006 c1 lost-in-rhapsody
very sweet...you use such vivid words and flowery imagery, i can only say this is bittersweet...
- by the way im also dancingintherain, lol, so I'm still lovin your poetry!
keep writing~
very sweet...you use such vivid words and flowery imagery, i can only say this is bittersweet...
- by the way im also dancingintherain, lol, so I'm still lovin your poetry!
keep writing~
2/18/2006 c1 18twistedtruths
Great stuff! I loved the flow of the words and the discribtion. It was really good. Great job.
18twistedtruthsGreat stuff! I loved the flow of the words and the discribtion. It was really good. Great job.
2/18/2006 c1 12eighteen hundred
I liked this, actually. I didn't think I would, but I did. I think some more interesting diction would improve it greatly, but as is, good stuff.
12eighteen hundredI liked this, actually. I didn't think I would, but I did. I think some more interesting diction would improve it greatly, but as is, good stuff.