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for Sandy hair and swollen ankle she was once a beauty

4/12/2006 c1 6hear me smile
That's a truly wonderful description. That last line is the best. Keep it up.
3/10/2006 c1 a lonely september
beautiful. i love the topic.
2/19/2006 c1 36norg
nice poem but the last line is it meant to say "and her bump" or is it meant to be "at her bump" just wondering thats all but congratulations, again on writing a great poem...
2/19/2006 c1 37Miss Anonymous hp
That's so sad... great description. Keep up the wonderful work!
2/18/2006 c1 88multiples of six
I like it.. it has a stream-of-consciousness type of flow, kinda. Don't breasts grow when you're pregnant, though? Meh. =)
2/18/2006 c1 19toxic-noodle725
good one! nicely done! well written. good job!
2/18/2006 c1 12eighteen hundred
This was pretty good. Diction could be more entertaining and the formatting... You might try breaking up the lines a bit more, just to see what it would sound like. But a good piece overall.
2/18/2006 c1 11AerosolSoul
It would have been much better if it had been proofread.

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