for Grey to Blue4/19/2006 c1 
13Mortifer Amor Phasmus
I didn't mind the cliches. Sometimes even cliches just work. I love your poems they are so good at communicating emotions :)!
13Mortifer Amor PhasmusI didn't mind the cliches. Sometimes even cliches just work. I love your poems they are so good at communicating emotions :)!
3/14/2006 c1 43je suis une pomme du terre
Sometimes cliches can be used over and over and still be original because its always from a different person's point of view. Everyone sees things a little differently than the next person. Very good poem, sounds like you really love this person.
43je suis une pomme du terreSometimes cliches can be used over and over and still be original because its always from a different person's point of view. Everyone sees things a little differently than the next person. Very good poem, sounds like you really love this person.
3/4/2006 c1 Benjamin - To Be Deleted
Big, ugly cliches or not, this is a beautiful piece. You did a great job.
Big, ugly cliches or not, this is a beautiful piece. You did a great job.
2/23/2006 c1 132mizu no kokoro
it had an overall feeling that really warmed my heart^^ good work
keep writing!
132mizu no kokoroit had an overall feeling that really warmed my heart^^ good work
keep writing!
2/22/2006 c1 121Seeker of the Way
this is a nice expression of your heart at the time you needed to write, nice! I write all kinds of different things and ways, it's funny you pick the one just totaly crazy-ass satirical one! Thanks for the review!
121Seeker of the Waythis is a nice expression of your heart at the time you needed to write, nice! I write all kinds of different things and ways, it's funny you pick the one just totaly crazy-ass satirical one! Thanks for the review!
2/21/2006 c1 2callmebelle
I love the line "your attention is my drug." don't worry about cliches- we ALL use them! overall, great and very true poem. keep writing!
2callmebelleI love the line "your attention is my drug." don't worry about cliches- we ALL use them! overall, great and very true poem. keep writing!
2/20/2006 c1 123Black and White Dreams
dont worry about cliches! they were blended perfectly! i can relate to this really well... i have all kinds of boy problems! lol! really good job, though! keep writing! choa! love, caitlin
by the way, thx for the review!
123Black and White Dreamsdont worry about cliches! they were blended perfectly! i can relate to this really well... i have all kinds of boy problems! lol! really good job, though! keep writing! choa! love, caitlin
by the way, thx for the review!
2/20/2006 c1 40Jareth the Monk
This would kind of sound good on one of those Hallmark cards that opens up into a booklet, I don't know if they even make those anymore. Reminds me of an old Hollies song from the 70s. Hope I'm not showing my age, 'cause I'm not all that old yet. I like the addiction part, and you ought to include emotions of dependency like the withdrawal shakes, twitches, and tantrums. A solid piece of good ole teen dream love sickness poetry.
40Jareth the MonkThis would kind of sound good on one of those Hallmark cards that opens up into a booklet, I don't know if they even make those anymore. Reminds me of an old Hollies song from the 70s. Hope I'm not showing my age, 'cause I'm not all that old yet. I like the addiction part, and you ought to include emotions of dependency like the withdrawal shakes, twitches, and tantrums. A solid piece of good ole teen dream love sickness poetry.
2/19/2006 c1 131midnighteyes-xo
This is really good, wow, hits home for me, because I'm in the same situation. You're a very good writer, I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. Pray keep it up !
P.S. I didn't go back and actually look for the cliches, but I didn't really notice any while I was reading, so don't sweat it.
131midnighteyes-xoThis is really good, wow, hits home for me, because I'm in the same situation. You're a very good writer, I'm looking forward to reading more of your work. Pray keep it up !
P.S. I didn't go back and actually look for the cliches, but I didn't really notice any while I was reading, so don't sweat it.
2/19/2006 c1 32AlboChick
wow...the line where you say "How I always want to be with you,but wont always let myself" is completely my situation and i can relate to this. thats prob. why i liked this poem so much. and don't wry about the cliches cuz they blended perfectly. -albochick
32AlboChickwow...the line where you say "How I always want to be with you,but wont always let myself" is completely my situation and i can relate to this. thats prob. why i liked this poem so much. and don't wry about the cliches cuz they blended perfectly. -albochick
2/19/2006 c1 17sunday night sky
some cliches, yes, but also some great imagery. on the whole, i like it. good job!
17sunday night skysome cliches, yes, but also some great imagery. on the whole, i like it. good job!