for Encounter by Moonlight2/24/2006 c1 
47Paper Bag Ghost
WoW! Your poem is so good. It left me all chilly inside... I love it! And thank you for the review! (My name is because if you rip your eyes out of your head, ther would be alot of blood...).
47Paper Bag GhostWoW! Your poem is so good. It left me all chilly inside... I love it! And thank you for the review! (My name is because if you rip your eyes out of your head, ther would be alot of blood...).
2/21/2006 c1 121Seeker of the Way
This is very evocative! One way to try to defeat our fears is to name them, if you name it, you have power over, so say some of man's oldest "magic spells" (Adam got to name all the plants and animals and what not).You use some nice interior rhymes and rhymes from line to line, I like the look of the word falling actually falling, and the g as part of the next line, giong into the sheets. You also have some pretty good metaphors/similies here to try to describe the indescrible here. This is your writing gift, for you experience things so differently from the rest of us.Is this for a grade? Good luck!Don't be so hard on yourself, your poetry is NOT utter crap, just wait till you put it to your own music, you'll see!~ John TrueP.S. You know you can use my poetry as song lyrics as long as you give me proper credit/royalties. =p
121Seeker of the WayThis is very evocative! One way to try to defeat our fears is to name them, if you name it, you have power over, so say some of man's oldest "magic spells" (Adam got to name all the plants and animals and what not).You use some nice interior rhymes and rhymes from line to line, I like the look of the word falling actually falling, and the g as part of the next line, giong into the sheets. You also have some pretty good metaphors/similies here to try to describe the indescrible here. This is your writing gift, for you experience things so differently from the rest of us.Is this for a grade? Good luck!Don't be so hard on yourself, your poetry is NOT utter crap, just wait till you put it to your own music, you'll see!~ John TrueP.S. You know you can use my poetry as song lyrics as long as you give me proper credit/royalties. =p
2/20/2006 c1 review
hey everyone thinks they suck when they write poems (i read your prof hehe). but youre not bad. actually. youre really good xDcheck out some of my other poems. theyre much better (i think...) than the one you reviewed.check it out.
hey everyone thinks they suck when they write poems (i read your prof hehe). but youre not bad. actually. youre really good xDcheck out some of my other poems. theyre much better (i think...) than the one you reviewed.check it out.
2/20/2006 c1 24FarseerFool
I really enjoyed the poem and the flow was good. Though the end confused me a little bit but then somethings re better not understood. Keep writing!
24FarseerFoolI really enjoyed the poem and the flow was good. Though the end confused me a little bit but then somethings re better not understood. Keep writing!