for Daisygirl4/19/2008 c1 
16One-Hand Clap
This was a good poem.
I liked the irreverant narration to it, and the ending twist - 'you're just jealous' - because a lot of Anorexics tend to feel that way.
Also, I liked the first stanza's format, whether intentional or not (I'm guessing it was deliberate), it really worked for the story.
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16One-Hand ClapThis was a good poem.
I liked the irreverant narration to it, and the ending twist - 'you're just jealous' - because a lot of Anorexics tend to feel that way.
Also, I liked the first stanza's format, whether intentional or not (I'm guessing it was deliberate), it really worked for the story.
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10/16/2007 c1 luv me like no other
ha, this is so true. I like the shape of your poem.
how is it that fat people can call people skinny with a look of disgust on their face, but skinny people can't look in disgust at fat people?
ha, this is so true. I like the shape of your poem.
how is it that fat people can call people skinny with a look of disgust on their face, but skinny people can't look in disgust at fat people?
7/10/2007 c1 1Kirane
I'm reading through your poems now, and although the phrasing in this poem doesn't strike me as much as some of your others, I just had to comment on the format. I love how it gets thinner. I don't see poets play with the shape of their poems nearly as much as I'd like to.
1KiraneI'm reading through your poems now, and although the phrasing in this poem doesn't strike me as much as some of your others, I just had to comment on the format. I love how it gets thinner. I don't see poets play with the shape of their poems nearly as much as I'd like to.
9/25/2006 c1 64realityescapesher
the form of this is flawless and really emphasises the idea of anorexia. wonderfully done.
-aly
64realityescapesherthe form of this is flawless and really emphasises the idea of anorexia. wonderfully done.
-aly
7/5/2006 c1 the naked civil servant
oh jesus. the format is tight-lacingly CRUEL. gorgeous black dripping denial... i fucking LOVE it
oh jesus. the format is tight-lacingly CRUEL. gorgeous black dripping denial... i fucking LOVE it
4/9/2006 c1 dancingintherain
wow you took the words and feelings right out of my mouth= ive been there and know exactly how it felt to be that way- and still feel a little like that...loved it
wow you took the words and feelings right out of my mouth= ive been there and know exactly how it felt to be that way- and still feel a little like that...loved it
3/6/2006 c1 67astral boy
cool. i liked the title, and the straighten, smarten widen part.
thanks for your kind reviews.
67astral boycool. i liked the title, and the straighten, smarten widen part.
thanks for your kind reviews.
2/24/2006 c1 12Bananas in a Blender
Completely random, but I love how the lines at the top look like an ice cream cone.
Awesome writing, and I loved the title.
Reading your poems makes me feel like I'm just barely skimming the surface of the meaning behind them.
And it makes me laugh insanely, then tell the voices in my head to shut up.
12Bananas in a BlenderCompletely random, but I love how the lines at the top look like an ice cream cone.
Awesome writing, and I loved the title.
Reading your poems makes me feel like I'm just barely skimming the surface of the meaning behind them.
And it makes me laugh insanely, then tell the voices in my head to shut up.
2/22/2006 c1 5Summer Shudder
This is definitely one of my favourites out of your poems. It just says...well, pretty much everything about anorexia. I especially like how you shaped the words so that the whole thing got thinner. And the last line, it ends the poem beautifully. I love the way you write. It's so...cool! Keep writing!
5Summer ShudderThis is definitely one of my favourites out of your poems. It just says...well, pretty much everything about anorexia. I especially like how you shaped the words so that the whole thing got thinner. And the last line, it ends the poem beautifully. I love the way you write. It's so...cool! Keep writing!