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5/26/2006 c1 73ten pts above average
hmm.. I liked this but than again I didnt.. I liked how you opened the poem.. I liked the very descriptive lines.. but you started off rhyming than stopped than started rhyming again.. If your going to rhyme, rhyme the whole poem.. just a little constructive criticism =) but all in all it was ok.. just not my normal read

btw-thanks for the review.. please review more && I'll do the same in return =)
2/22/2006 c1 2miss understanding
That seems so sad, somehow. I like this poem in a way. It's mature content, sure, but it's not explicit or pornographic. It simply ... is. Interesting word choice of empty and broken, anger and pain. And then refering to it as a divorce. Beautifully written and the rhyming scheme flowed smoothly. Good job.

~Choco
2/22/2006 c1 54HomeSickLoser
Woh, thought it was talking about sometin dirty in the begining but yes, inteligent words and weaving all together

thx for the commentes btw

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