for Drops of Crimson Life on Ivory Threads6/28/2006 c1 
40Jareth the Monk
Hello, haven't been here in a while and missed your poems. Truly and no joke, this is easily my favorite from you so far. This doesn't even have to rhyme because it just makes the disjointed feel fit the mood even better. Too bad the mirror didn't break, then you could describe the fragments of yourself, shifting and glittering in the ruin. Endless dance though no one is leading maybe? You should do a series of these and give them a name like "Dream Cycles" or something.
40Jareth the MonkHello, haven't been here in a while and missed your poems. Truly and no joke, this is easily my favorite from you so far. This doesn't even have to rhyme because it just makes the disjointed feel fit the mood even better. Too bad the mirror didn't break, then you could describe the fragments of yourself, shifting and glittering in the ruin. Endless dance though no one is leading maybe? You should do a series of these and give them a name like "Dream Cycles" or something.
6/16/2006 c1 177Chaotic Charisma
Gotta tell you I like this one better than the truck one. Much more descriptive and has a bit of a theme to it. We all know what that feels like; being in our own world because that's the only place you're really safe, and yet, that place is so lonely. I liked the Queen and only citizen line that about sums it up. What can you do? That seems to be a running theme in your pieces... lol and in reply to your comment on my piece, yeah, she knows I think she's a pain in the butt ^_^ I like your work, keep it up!
177Chaotic CharismaGotta tell you I like this one better than the truck one. Much more descriptive and has a bit of a theme to it. We all know what that feels like; being in our own world because that's the only place you're really safe, and yet, that place is so lonely. I liked the Queen and only citizen line that about sums it up. What can you do? That seems to be a running theme in your pieces... lol and in reply to your comment on my piece, yeah, she knows I think she's a pain in the butt ^_^ I like your work, keep it up!
5/9/2006 c1 67A Midsummer Nights Sacrifice
Sweet... So cool I love how you described it so much it gives a clearer image I really, really like that. Good job!
~Angel~~Ange~~Engel~~Tenshi~
67A Midsummer Nights SacrificeSweet... So cool I love how you described it so much it gives a clearer image I really, really like that. Good job!
~Angel~~Ange~~Engel~~Tenshi~
4/20/2006 c1 pure grace
Hey! I do like the description; I think it really enhances the poem. The words you picked were really good too - not only because there are only so many words for white and red, but because they made the poem flow really well. Good job! And thank you so much for reviewing my stuff; most of it I've never shown to anyone, so seeing someone review it is such a high. Thanks!
Hey! I do like the description; I think it really enhances the poem. The words you picked were really good too - not only because there are only so many words for white and red, but because they made the poem flow really well. Good job! And thank you so much for reviewing my stuff; most of it I've never shown to anyone, so seeing someone review it is such a high. Thanks!
4/19/2006 c1 37thisgirlssmile
i like it. kind of reminds me of my own style, but has a nice flair to it that i dont think i might be able to get. no it wasnt over descriptive. i liked it a lot.
thanks for the review
37thisgirlssmilei like it. kind of reminds me of my own style, but has a nice flair to it that i dont think i might be able to get. no it wasnt over descriptive. i liked it a lot.
thanks for the review
4/19/2006 c1 13Mortifer Amor Phasmus
Oh. I think you did really good. I know how hard it can be to really describe in detail a dream. I love waking up and writing like that. But it can be so hard to get across the exact feeling of the dream.
13Mortifer Amor PhasmusOh. I think you did really good. I know how hard it can be to really describe in detail a dream. I love waking up and writing like that. But it can be so hard to get across the exact feeling of the dream.
4/17/2006 c1 32Veronika
Very deep, and the description isn't too much; it just furthers the imagery. ^_^ I love it, and I love the picture your words have painted.
32VeronikaVery deep, and the description isn't too much; it just furthers the imagery. ^_^ I love it, and I love the picture your words have painted.
3/28/2006 c1 6fireintrouble
Wow.That pretty much describes this poem I feel. The descriptive-ness isn't too much, its perfect, and needed, and I love it.
6fireintroubleWow.That pretty much describes this poem I feel. The descriptive-ness isn't too much, its perfect, and needed, and I love it.
3/14/2006 c1 43je suis une pomme du terre
Yeah I liked it a lot. Dreams have a weird way of pulling in bits and pieces of things from your mind, don't they? Beautiful poem. Really well done.
43je suis une pomme du terreYeah I liked it a lot. Dreams have a weird way of pulling in bits and pieces of things from your mind, don't they? Beautiful poem. Really well done.
3/12/2006 c1 41FreezingFire
The poem has a wispy, dreamlike quality to it, that is punctuated with the great imagery. Good job!
41FreezingFireThe poem has a wispy, dreamlike quality to it, that is punctuated with the great imagery. Good job!
2/24/2006 c1 17wolfiel
I didn't find this overly descriptive. It almost seemed fitting, seeing as how it made things seem more complex then they really were. The simple bits of it still made a pretty good impression on me, and it reminded me quite a bit of those faint dreams that just seem to run farther and farther away from you once you wake up.
17wolfielI didn't find this overly descriptive. It almost seemed fitting, seeing as how it made things seem more complex then they really were. The simple bits of it still made a pretty good impression on me, and it reminded me quite a bit of those faint dreams that just seem to run farther and farther away from you once you wake up.
2/24/2006 c1 2callmebelle
this is beautiful! i love the description, and the dream seems so surreal... keep it up!
2callmebellethis is beautiful! i love the description, and the dream seems so surreal... keep it up!
2/23/2006 c1 21Dina Rogoziansky
oh wow, that's really good. i love it. it flows very smoothly, like a river or silk against your skin, or something. good job.
21Dina Rogozianskyoh wow, that's really good. i love it. it flows very smoothly, like a river or silk against your skin, or something. good job.