for The earth and its passion5/20/2007 c1 
121CrazyTurtles
Very beautiful. I like how you make all the subjects change to another meaning so easily and smooth. This is truly a masterpeice! Thank you for the review also.
P.S. I don't know what you mean by it isnt supposed to make sense. It makes perfect sense to me.
~Turtles
121CrazyTurtlesVery beautiful. I like how you make all the subjects change to another meaning so easily and smooth. This is truly a masterpeice! Thank you for the review also.
P.S. I don't know what you mean by it isnt supposed to make sense. It makes perfect sense to me.
~Turtles
6/28/2006 c1 Robin Siskin
Good train of thought. It's like a poem I've written, except mine was grotesque in the imagery, and this was peaceful and nostalgic. I couldn't name any errors because it's a train of thought. I'm biased towards them.
Good train of thought. It's like a poem I've written, except mine was grotesque in the imagery, and this was peaceful and nostalgic. I couldn't name any errors because it's a train of thought. I'm biased towards them.
4/25/2006 c1 51Aetha Daemon
This is a swirling vortex of color and vivid imagery! Now, I know that we all have difficulty uploading our documents, so don't take this the wrong way. :) You just need to find that one little 'i' and make it an 'I'! Now, I think that in a couple places the poem could benefit from tasteful and subtle punctuation to make your ideas flow more clearly.
51Aetha DaemonThis is a swirling vortex of color and vivid imagery! Now, I know that we all have difficulty uploading our documents, so don't take this the wrong way. :) You just need to find that one little 'i' and make it an 'I'! Now, I think that in a couple places the poem could benefit from tasteful and subtle punctuation to make your ideas flow more clearly.
3/5/2006 c1 TheCapedAvenger
That is nifty. It's almost like that stream-of-consciousness stuff we've been doing in brit lit. I like the word imagery and the not-quite-cliches ("stars in absense/makes tht heart grow fonder").
That is nifty. It's almost like that stream-of-consciousness stuff we've been doing in brit lit. I like the word imagery and the not-quite-cliches ("stars in absense/makes tht heart grow fonder").
3/4/2006 c1 samantha
i loved this poem ,i love how the imagery. each time you described something it brought back certin memories from my life like the little things i have noticed. all this must sound wierd or not familar to the purpose of this piece of art but thats what i got out of it.it was a pleasure to read and dont ever give up this gift.
i loved this poem ,i love how the imagery. each time you described something it brought back certin memories from my life like the little things i have noticed. all this must sound wierd or not familar to the purpose of this piece of art but thats what i got out of it.it was a pleasure to read and dont ever give up this gift.
3/4/2006 c1 7firefairy27
That's realy weird. but in a good way. I like how it changes from subject to subject that are seemingly unrelated, and you put in some kind of connection that most people never would think of.
~Fairy
7firefairy27That's realy weird. but in a good way. I like how it changes from subject to subject that are seemingly unrelated, and you put in some kind of connection that most people never would think of.
~Fairy
2/24/2006 c1 144chaos called creation
b e a u t i f u l. I love how you made this so relatable. Lovely work
144chaos called creationb e a u t i f u l. I love how you made this so relatable. Lovely work