for a love interlude10/4/2006 c1 
16Enigmatic Night
This is a very disturbingly good poem.You relay your emotions very well, and it has a raw uncontrolled feeling to it..which makes it all the more believable.
Although you do get a tad bit carried away with the dots/slashes/higher-lower case letters...
I liked it..
16Enigmatic NightThis is a very disturbingly good poem.You relay your emotions very well, and it has a raw uncontrolled feeling to it..which makes it all the more believable.
Although you do get a tad bit carried away with the dots/slashes/higher-lower case letters...
I liked it..
2/27/2006 c1 69mostly water
"I can’t believe I fell for all the p.r.e.t.t.y words you wroteI was pulled into an abyss - a restless, sullen placeYou’re as e-mol-lient as a Nivea s/u/n/l/ot/I/o/nYour disappointment c.u.t.s into me like broken pieces of a JAR"
"I’m s.t.a.i.n.e.d with your pre-senceYou left me with s/m/a/l/l/ scars on theinside of my tHiGh & theoutside of my hEaRt"
To die for. Not sure I like the cApSpLaYiNg too much, but in the 'chorus' it reall works. Disturbingly faves.
69mostly water"I can’t believe I fell for all the p.r.e.t.t.y words you wroteI was pulled into an abyss - a restless, sullen placeYou’re as e-mol-lient as a Nivea s/u/n/l/ot/I/o/nYour disappointment c.u.t.s into me like broken pieces of a JAR"
"I’m s.t.a.i.n.e.d with your pre-senceYou left me with s/m/a/l/l/ scars on theinside of my tHiGh & theoutside of my hEaRt"
To die for. Not sure I like the cApSpLaYiNg too much, but in the 'chorus' it reall works. Disturbingly faves.