
3/1/2006 c1
2DaggerPen
Wow, this is cool. It's a very interesting way of telling a story: you should write more exerts like this.

Wow, this is cool. It's a very interesting way of telling a story: you should write more exerts like this.
3/1/2006 c1
3PencilGuardian
This reads like one of those coloured boxes in a chapter that contain superfluous information about the topic. I love the poem-very much drawing on the cultural forces that generated our own art ("Ring Around the Rosey"=Bubonic Plague). Qnimble the Survived is a brilliant name, I might add. I spotted a typo (NeWorld, paragraph 4), fyi. I'm floored that you chose the term "Earthian" rather than "Earthling" or "Terran." I've never seen it outside my own writer's club. I also thought it was interesting to note the blatantly bias of Prof. Baume. It doesn't read like your usual politically correct, technical piece of writing.

This reads like one of those coloured boxes in a chapter that contain superfluous information about the topic. I love the poem-very much drawing on the cultural forces that generated our own art ("Ring Around the Rosey"=Bubonic Plague). Qnimble the Survived is a brilliant name, I might add. I spotted a typo (NeWorld, paragraph 4), fyi. I'm floored that you chose the term "Earthian" rather than "Earthling" or "Terran." I've never seen it outside my own writer's club. I also thought it was interesting to note the blatantly bias of Prof. Baume. It doesn't read like your usual politically correct, technical piece of writing.