for Raindrop Wings7/24/2006 c1 
35TeaWithOnions
Gorgous, simply gourgous
The imagery is beautiful, and I love the idea of raindrop wings... I might get me a pair! (yee-haw)
35TeaWithOnionsGorgous, simply gourgous
The imagery is beautiful, and I love the idea of raindrop wings... I might get me a pair! (yee-haw)
4/18/2006 c1 1rrmehta364
Great poem. I don't normally like freeverse poetry, but you're pretty good.
"Maybe I’m just too human.
Or maybe you’re just someone else’s angel." : I really liked those lines.
1rrmehta364Great poem. I don't normally like freeverse poetry, but you're pretty good.
"Maybe I’m just too human.
Or maybe you’re just someone else’s angel." : I really liked those lines.
4/15/2006 c1 11authordream4life
this was a very moving poem, and I loved it. I've read a lot of poems on here, and I'm serious, I haven't read one this good in a while.
11authordream4lifethis was a very moving poem, and I loved it. I've read a lot of poems on here, and I'm serious, I haven't read one this good in a while.
4/4/2006 c1 27TMO
Constructive criticism? alright I'll try...
Some of the lines seemed empty, like they were unimportant and didn't mean anything. Some lines caught my eye though, such as raindrop wings and clover kissed wishes. Makes me think of olde ireland. heh, not a bad thing. also the ending made me think of a song by 'They might be giants' something like "she's an angel". Personally when you said washes hearts from your sleeves at the beginning, I was hoping for flowers and not hearts. Flowers make anything look pretty, but the heart is just a quivering bloody mass of tissue.
anywho, email me if you want, I'd also like some CC on my 'stabat spiritum' (or spiritus? I don't know latin very well)
Sorry for the horrid grammer in this review, I'm a little rushed (sh... don't tell anyone, but I haven't written my english paper yet like I said I would...)
hugs,EIB
27TMOConstructive criticism? alright I'll try...
Some of the lines seemed empty, like they were unimportant and didn't mean anything. Some lines caught my eye though, such as raindrop wings and clover kissed wishes. Makes me think of olde ireland. heh, not a bad thing. also the ending made me think of a song by 'They might be giants' something like "she's an angel". Personally when you said washes hearts from your sleeves at the beginning, I was hoping for flowers and not hearts. Flowers make anything look pretty, but the heart is just a quivering bloody mass of tissue.
anywho, email me if you want, I'd also like some CC on my 'stabat spiritum' (or spiritus? I don't know latin very well)
Sorry for the horrid grammer in this review, I'm a little rushed (sh... don't tell anyone, but I haven't written my english paper yet like I said I would...)
hugs,EIB
3/28/2006 c1 124in theory
To be constructive, I thought the line "in a chaotic world of tears" was a little mediocre compared to some of the fabulous metaphors, "raindrop wings" is especially pretty. Other than maybe jazzing that up, I can't think of anything else :) nice work
124in theoryTo be constructive, I thought the line "in a chaotic world of tears" was a little mediocre compared to some of the fabulous metaphors, "raindrop wings" is especially pretty. Other than maybe jazzing that up, I can't think of anything else :) nice work
3/18/2006 c1 197the Stranger in the moonlight
Breathtaking, literally. Apparently I was holding my breath and released after this, but not to my knowledge. Well there is my action of Randomology today other then emailing you I guess.
Talk later. Keep writing great job as usual. Keep wrting poetry and I will so definately keep reading.
Sincerely,
the Stranger in the moonlight.
197the Stranger in the moonlightBreathtaking, literally. Apparently I was holding my breath and released after this, but not to my knowledge. Well there is my action of Randomology today other then emailing you I guess.
Talk later. Keep writing great job as usual. Keep wrting poetry and I will so definately keep reading.
Sincerely,
the Stranger in the moonlight.
3/18/2006 c1 9Rachel Peterson
Again, beautiful! : ) It brings a nice image to mind, clarity and beauty.
9Rachel PetersonAgain, beautiful! : ) It brings a nice image to mind, clarity and beauty.
3/15/2006 c1 5Drops of Jewpiter
great poem. you have such an orignal, descriptive writing style. i love your work~dropsofjewpiter~
5Drops of Jewpitergreat poem. you have such an orignal, descriptive writing style. i love your work~dropsofjewpiter~
3/5/2006 c1 20sloppy firsts
o very nice phrases in this. Really liked 'Hearts from your sleeves' because it reminds me of that wearing your heart on your sleeve metaphor. I smiled when i saw the word chaotic btw ;) love the line 'clover kissed wishes' it has a nice ring to it. Keep up the good work!
20sloppy firstso very nice phrases in this. Really liked 'Hearts from your sleeves' because it reminds me of that wearing your heart on your sleeve metaphor. I smiled when i saw the word chaotic btw ;) love the line 'clover kissed wishes' it has a nice ring to it. Keep up the good work!
3/2/2006 c1 20Autumn Dance
Hey cutie...Nice to see a new poem in your name. I have to say I do like it, but i'm not in the mood for poetry. I dunno- I was reading this and it felt quite bitter. Don't take that to be a slander against you, it's just the way I read and interpreted it. It just felt too-"Oh i've read this before" kind of poem. I dunno- hard to understand. But good all the same. x
20Autumn DanceHey cutie...Nice to see a new poem in your name. I have to say I do like it, but i'm not in the mood for poetry. I dunno- I was reading this and it felt quite bitter. Don't take that to be a slander against you, it's just the way I read and interpreted it. It just felt too-"Oh i've read this before" kind of poem. I dunno- hard to understand. But good all the same. x