for Bridge12/19/2004 c1 
5FaithFaithFaith
I truely enjoyed this story. It was very touching... very deep... I loved it, truely. I cant think of anything that possibly could have improved it. It was perfect. And I liked the way you used japanese in it, made it more interesting.
5FaithFaithFaithI truely enjoyed this story. It was very touching... very deep... I loved it, truely. I cant think of anything that possibly could have improved it. It was perfect. And I liked the way you used japanese in it, made it more interesting.
7/26/2003 c1 35Jordyana
OMG! Another great story! I loved it! So sad...And Kodoku...Oh, she was so sad! I feel bad for her! I just wanna give her a hug! *hugs Kodoku* And the bridge thing...That ws awesome...How she eventually let Yoriyoi pass...I cried! I really did!
Only one thing...I didn't understand some of the language...Japanese, I presume? Well, if you could translate that, that'd be nice! But hey, GREAT STORY!
Keep on writing!
-Jordyana 0;)
35JordyanaOMG! Another great story! I loved it! So sad...And Kodoku...Oh, she was so sad! I feel bad for her! I just wanna give her a hug! *hugs Kodoku* And the bridge thing...That ws awesome...How she eventually let Yoriyoi pass...I cried! I really did!
Only one thing...I didn't understand some of the language...Japanese, I presume? Well, if you could translate that, that'd be nice! But hey, GREAT STORY!
Keep on writing!
-Jordyana 0;)
1/15/2001 c1 Guest
I really enjoyed your story...
I really enjoyed your story...
12/29/2000 c1 littlerun
deep, that was really good!
deep, that was really good!
10/22/2000 c1 11KittyKMae
Not bad, if u were going for the deep meaning type of thing. If it were longer u could maybe get it published.
11KittyKMaeNot bad, if u were going for the deep meaning type of thing. If it were longer u could maybe get it published.
7/6/2000 c1 Cristy
Good story... makes you think. Keep writing.
Good story... makes you think. Keep writing.
6/28/2000 c1 dannii pezza
moving story...
very well written...
and keep me interested...
keep up the good work...
moving story...
very well written...
and keep me interested...
keep up the good work...
6/25/2000 c1 29Rob
wow, that IS pretty good. a bit sad, and a happy twist ending, the kind I love. I'm going to assume you've read "Bridge to Terrabethia" This, if made into a longer story, would be much better than that book. I've read many sad books and stories about death, but Terrabethis is the worst. The girl dies for no reason other than to progress the story, and the end isn't very good. (sorry, this story reminded me of it, I read it in 3rd grade and it really hurt me) But your story is very good,and I know the "Die with a smile" feeling. Keep up the good work.
29Robwow, that IS pretty good. a bit sad, and a happy twist ending, the kind I love. I'm going to assume you've read "Bridge to Terrabethia" This, if made into a longer story, would be much better than that book. I've read many sad books and stories about death, but Terrabethis is the worst. The girl dies for no reason other than to progress the story, and the end isn't very good. (sorry, this story reminded me of it, I read it in 3rd grade and it really hurt me) But your story is very good,and I know the "Die with a smile" feeling. Keep up the good work.
6/23/2000 c1 R
I'm glad I took the time to search this one out and read it. I like the use of Japanese in your story.
I'm glad I took the time to search this one out and read it. I like the use of Japanese in your story.
6/7/2000 c1 13Manon
Hmmmmm... interesting. It's very... I don't know... sparse. But it definitely holds the attention.
I think I'd have liked to see a little more background on Yoriyoi at least, to understand her better. But it's good.
13ManonHmmmmm... interesting. It's very... I don't know... sparse. But it definitely holds the attention.
I think I'd have liked to see a little more background on Yoriyoi at least, to understand her better. But it's good.
6/3/2000 c1 Asa
Awesome whered yage the song.
Awesome whered yage the song.
6/3/2000 c1 Barbara Fett
Awwwww... :-)
Awwwww... :-)
6/2/2000 c1 Chase
Very touching story. And very meaningful.
Very touching story. And very meaningful.
6/2/2000 c1 Laurel M. Valerian
That was sad. While I was reading it shivers kept going up and down my left side. I think that it means that the story really touched me, and it did. Magnificently written!
That was sad. While I was reading it shivers kept going up and down my left side. I think that it means that the story really touched me, and it did. Magnificently written!