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3/27/2006 c1 67A Midsummer Nights Sacrifice
Dude ALL of my good poetry is written either when i'm emotionaly drained or so very depressed. Good, good dark, nice and loverly i wuv it.
3/8/2006 c1 69pantheratigrissumatrae
Beautifully written. Very nice ending. Keep writing!
3/8/2006 c1 42Anecdotes Of The Arcane
OK this rox. Thats all i can say. It rox. Don't stop writing. And btw, I am afraid. I am very afraid o.o. . .
3/5/2006 c1 32eldrin
A poem managing toconvey angst without sounding pathetic...I don't see that very often on this site. Excellent work!
3/3/2006 c1 90Dragonzz
Wow. I really love how some of the lines are broken and then continue on the next line. For example, "I thought that I could trustYou with what was left". Really good job!

~dragonzz~
3/3/2006 c1 64not sure yet
o that's happy, good flow, nice job
3/3/2006 c1 97Farran
Wow nice poem well Done. The "Chocking on your word" was particularly effective.
3/2/2006 c1 52meaninglessTears
heh i like this one. reminds me of wut my friend is going thro right now... keep writing! and u're going on my favorite authors list now ^-^
3/2/2006 c1 48iwillshine
wow, i read it and it reminded me of my last break-up and oddly it made me smile. it was excellent!
3/2/2006 c1 43lronMaiden
I like the structure. It starts of with the persona very depressed and then he/she sort of makes themselves feel better towards the end. There are a few cliches though, that you might like to change or get rid of. eg "you left me broken"

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