for Forget me Not3/3/2006 c1 
241Werewolf Nighteyes
I like the overall 'feel' of the poem, though i feel like some lines didn't match up so well. Like the line that ended with 'doves', but that's just me.
241Werewolf NighteyesI like the overall 'feel' of the poem, though i feel like some lines didn't match up so well. Like the line that ended with 'doves', but that's just me.
3/3/2006 c1 13Shadowhound
hm...honestly, this is one of the few works of yours that i dislike.
the rythem isn't very good, so the message if the poem isn't easy to pick out as you want it to be. some of the couplets don't rhyme so it makes it even more confusing. although it has a good message to it, the scewed up tempo makes it barely understandable. okay, i'm repeating myself. basically, the IDEA is good, just not the way you deliver it. try to look over it again and smooth out the wrinkles.
Shadowhound
13Shadowhoundhm...honestly, this is one of the few works of yours that i dislike.
the rythem isn't very good, so the message if the poem isn't easy to pick out as you want it to be. some of the couplets don't rhyme so it makes it even more confusing. although it has a good message to it, the scewed up tempo makes it barely understandable. okay, i'm repeating myself. basically, the IDEA is good, just not the way you deliver it. try to look over it again and smooth out the wrinkles.
Shadowhound