for Selfish People8/10/2006 c10 
243ShadowFane
I wouldn't mind a job as a journalist, but I'm 15, and I can't work ANYWHERE...They said no...Anyways, great chapter. I really like this story. It rocks!
SF
243ShadowFaneI wouldn't mind a job as a journalist, but I'm 15, and I can't work ANYWHERE...They said no...Anyways, great chapter. I really like this story. It rocks!
SF
8/10/2006 c9 ShadowFane
OMG...They kissed...on the farris wheel...WHY DOES EVERYTHING ALWAYS HAPPEN TO SOMEONE ELSE? Oh. Sorry. Moment's over. Great chapter. Wonder how this will affect everything.
SF
OMG...They kissed...on the farris wheel...WHY DOES EVERYTHING ALWAYS HAPPEN TO SOMEONE ELSE? Oh. Sorry. Moment's over. Great chapter. Wonder how this will affect everything.
SF
8/10/2006 c8 ShadowFane
YAY! I told you last review that I wanted something to happen, and lo! Something happens! Must...continue...kick ass...story...
SF
YAY! I told you last review that I wanted something to happen, and lo! Something happens! Must...continue...kick ass...story...
SF
8/10/2006 c7 ShadowFane
Oh. Shot down in flames. Sad. Still, great story. I want to see something happen with Luke and Madison. A fight, a date, a bedroom scene, anything! Oh, well. I'll wait patiently...
SF
Oh. Shot down in flames. Sad. Still, great story. I want to see something happen with Luke and Madison. A fight, a date, a bedroom scene, anything! Oh, well. I'll wait patiently...
SF
8/10/2006 c6 ShadowFane
Wow. I've never been out on a date, cause I'm like, a social loser, but this is definitely on my list of what NOT to do on one. It made a good chapter, though. I liked it a lot.
ShadowFane
Wow. I've never been out on a date, cause I'm like, a social loser, but this is definitely on my list of what NOT to do on one. It made a good chapter, though. I liked it a lot.
ShadowFane
8/10/2006 c5 ShadowFane
Oh, jeez. She likes him, but he likes her, and she likes...whoever she likes...isn't this an interesting triangle of love? I MUST find out how they deal with it. :)
ShadowFane
Oh, jeez. She likes him, but he likes her, and she likes...whoever she likes...isn't this an interesting triangle of love? I MUST find out how they deal with it. :)
ShadowFane
8/10/2006 c4 ShadowFane
Oh. Madison's taken. I wonder how this will affect the rest of the story...alright, alright. I'm going to chapter 5 now.
ShadowFane
Oh. Madison's taken. I wonder how this will affect the rest of the story...alright, alright. I'm going to chapter 5 now.
ShadowFane
8/10/2006 c3 ShadowFane
Aww...That was a sad chapter. It was really good, but really sad. I'm going to read chapter 4 now.
ShadowFane
Aww...That was a sad chapter. It was really good, but really sad. I'm going to read chapter 4 now.
ShadowFane
8/9/2006 c15 mo
aw what no more? :( i still liked the way it ended though, weirdly sweet for them. Great job!
aw what no more? :( i still liked the way it ended though, weirdly sweet for them. Great job!
8/9/2006 c2 ShadowFane
Good chapter. I like Luke less and less the more I read about him. I hope he changes...
ShadowFane
Good chapter. I like Luke less and less the more I read about him. I hope he changes...
ShadowFane
8/9/2006 c1 ShadowFane
Oh, Lordie...This man is dense...I LIKE HIM! Great first chapter. I'm off to the next one!
ShadowFane
Oh, Lordie...This man is dense...I LIKE HIM! Great first chapter. I'm off to the next one!
ShadowFane
7/30/2006 c14 Enigmatic Specter
Holy, it's so interesting! I love your writing technique; it's a tad bit based on the loser girl + popular boy romance, but the way you put it into words makes it something totally different. I LOVE IT, can't wait for the next chapter :)
Holy, it's so interesting! I love your writing technique; it's a tad bit based on the loser girl + popular boy romance, but the way you put it into words makes it something totally different. I LOVE IT, can't wait for the next chapter :)
7/29/2006 c14 Calin Reznor
I picked this story up from a review on FP Reviews, I was at first just intrigued by the sarcasm but the more I read of it the more I enjoyed it.
It has an underlying cliche to it, which seeing as it is FP is not all that surprising. However your chrachters are what make this story incredibly unique. You have already pointed out that characterisation is what is important to you and I agree, it is what makes a story different.
Brad and Madison seem to touch my "annoying bone" with their complete and utter normalcy despite the fact that they are atypical in certain respects.
Luke and Vicky are great charachters, and developed quite well over the story. I could go on for a while about this and shall cease before I write an essay.
Excellent job, one of the few stories on FP that is worth reading and understanding as opposed to the usual badly written high school angst.
Cheers!
Calin.
I picked this story up from a review on FP Reviews, I was at first just intrigued by the sarcasm but the more I read of it the more I enjoyed it.
It has an underlying cliche to it, which seeing as it is FP is not all that surprising. However your chrachters are what make this story incredibly unique. You have already pointed out that characterisation is what is important to you and I agree, it is what makes a story different.
Brad and Madison seem to touch my "annoying bone" with their complete and utter normalcy despite the fact that they are atypical in certain respects.
Luke and Vicky are great charachters, and developed quite well over the story. I could go on for a while about this and shall cease before I write an essay.
Excellent job, one of the few stories on FP that is worth reading and understanding as opposed to the usual badly written high school angst.
Cheers!
Calin.
7/27/2006 c12 4dotcult
please please please don't gag me any further with the pro-abortion propaganda...The way I see it is I'm pro-life, and if pro-life is anti-abortion, then you are anti-life. and don't give me that shit about a woman's right to choose. does anyone really have the right to choose murder? my friend survived an abortion okay? and i volunteered at a hospital where we were saving premies at 3 mo. don't act like abortion is heroic. saving premature babies is heroic. and you know i didn't really want to get so upset about this it's just really close to my heart, and i can see it is a little close to yours. just please keep that out of this. i'd love to keep reading your story but if it's going to hurt like this i can't. i'm a fan of yours, so i hope you don't think i'm saving this just to fight with you or tell you you're wrong ofr whatever. i hope this might give you something to think about for a few seconds but i can't wade thru any propaganda. get enough of it in the movies and tv and radio today...
4dotcultplease please please don't gag me any further with the pro-abortion propaganda...The way I see it is I'm pro-life, and if pro-life is anti-abortion, then you are anti-life. and don't give me that shit about a woman's right to choose. does anyone really have the right to choose murder? my friend survived an abortion okay? and i volunteered at a hospital where we were saving premies at 3 mo. don't act like abortion is heroic. saving premature babies is heroic. and you know i didn't really want to get so upset about this it's just really close to my heart, and i can see it is a little close to yours. just please keep that out of this. i'd love to keep reading your story but if it's going to hurt like this i can't. i'm a fan of yours, so i hope you don't think i'm saving this just to fight with you or tell you you're wrong ofr whatever. i hope this might give you something to think about for a few seconds but i can't wade thru any propaganda. get enough of it in the movies and tv and radio today...