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9/2/2007 c5 
11wildchild92
I like it, I like it! There are so few good mysteries out there, I agree. Um...I'm kinda working on a mystery story on my own, similar to this, except...kinda different too. Well, anyway, I was wondering if you had any advice on how to make an original, yet hard to solve, mystery like the ones in your story. Otherwise, I'll be forced to reuse mysteries from mystery novels and mangas, only with the names changed. And that would be totally pathetic!
11wildchild92I like it, I like it! There are so few good mysteries out there, I agree. Um...I'm kinda working on a mystery story on my own, similar to this, except...kinda different too. Well, anyway, I was wondering if you had any advice on how to make an original, yet hard to solve, mystery like the ones in your story. Otherwise, I'll be forced to reuse mysteries from mystery novels and mangas, only with the names changed. And that would be totally pathetic!
6/8/2007 c13 13NeoMiniTails
Compliments: I don’t remember if I saw any grammatical mistakes. If I did, they weren’t that big of mistakes so I forgot… I didn’t even know you updated… I just so happen to want to read your story. LOL. Once again, I must say, it was a very good chapter! Very good… not once could I call it boring… I sometimes find that beginnings of chapters are when a writer has their hardest time… because that when you need to hook people to your story… you don’t have that problem.
As usual, Riku-kun is awesome… I say that much too much. Lol… your sequence for how everything happened in the story went perfect, as usual.
Disappointers: I don’t remember anything being disappointing in my opinion.
Grammar: “…”
Originality: Very original for fictionpress…
Characterization: Beautiful characterization, it was easy to imagine every character’s personality….
Believability: For an anime, it would be believable… very believable.
For anything else, maybe not so much…. Actually, it could be…
But it is a comedy… it has enough believability
Suggestions: Nothing…
Overall Thoughts: It was done very good. I am so proud of you! Lol… well, now, this is my newest review style… its much more organized…
PS:
Oh, I'm working on my latest Miracle Knights chapter... hehe... I could understand why it'd take so long to update... and having ti written down and still unable to get the story updated... story of my updating! LOL! No worries! ^_^
13NeoMiniTailsCompliments: I don’t remember if I saw any grammatical mistakes. If I did, they weren’t that big of mistakes so I forgot… I didn’t even know you updated… I just so happen to want to read your story. LOL. Once again, I must say, it was a very good chapter! Very good… not once could I call it boring… I sometimes find that beginnings of chapters are when a writer has their hardest time… because that when you need to hook people to your story… you don’t have that problem.
As usual, Riku-kun is awesome… I say that much too much. Lol… your sequence for how everything happened in the story went perfect, as usual.
Disappointers: I don’t remember anything being disappointing in my opinion.
Grammar: “…”
Originality: Very original for fictionpress…
Characterization: Beautiful characterization, it was easy to imagine every character’s personality….
Believability: For an anime, it would be believable… very believable.
For anything else, maybe not so much…. Actually, it could be…
But it is a comedy… it has enough believability
Suggestions: Nothing…
Overall Thoughts: It was done very good. I am so proud of you! Lol… well, now, this is my newest review style… its much more organized…
PS:
Oh, I'm working on my latest Miracle Knights chapter... hehe... I could understand why it'd take so long to update... and having ti written down and still unable to get the story updated... story of my updating! LOL! No worries! ^_^
5/30/2007 c13 11CrystallineEyes
Wah! Please update soon!
It's getting more interesting!
^^
Anyway, Riku shot Chiaki a cold and irritated glare when she mentioned that "I'd marry him in a flash" statement?
Hmm...
^^
11CrystallineEyesWah! Please update soon!
It's getting more interesting!
^^
Anyway, Riku shot Chiaki a cold and irritated glare when she mentioned that "I'd marry him in a flash" statement?
Hmm...
^^
5/30/2007 c12 CrystallineEyes
This is cool...
^^
Funny and a mystery at the same time.
Damn, i would really love if Riku would fall for Chieko before she did.
This is cool...
^^
Funny and a mystery at the same time.
Damn, i would really love if Riku would fall for Chieko before she did.
5/30/2007 c8 CrystallineEyes
Wow...
I'm not so sure but i guess it's Okahito-san.
Hmm...just guessing.
Wow...
I'm not so sure but i guess it's Okahito-san.
Hmm...just guessing.
5/30/2007 c6 CrystallineEyes
Wow...so filipino ka rin?
Eheheh...
Anyways, great job. I really love it a lot.
^^
Please update soon!
Wow...so filipino ka rin?
Eheheh...
Anyways, great job. I really love it a lot.
^^
Please update soon!
5/29/2007 c4 CrystallineEyes
OH MAN!
AHAHHAHAHHA!
Bullet-bullet kabbom,lol!
Actually, what really made me laugh is on 'how' I he said it...!
LOL!
OH MAN!
AHAHHAHAHHA!
Bullet-bullet kabbom,lol!
Actually, what really made me laugh is on 'how' I he said it...!
LOL!
5/29/2007 c2 CrystallineEyes
Yay! I'm lovin' this.
Thanks for taking the time to write this up.
I could actually imagine the anime for this.
^^
Yay! I'm lovin' this.
Thanks for taking the time to write this up.
I could actually imagine the anime for this.
^^
5/8/2007 c13 1Renica the blue
It's so funny! Hee hee! I guess Chiaki-san gave up her crush on the T.V. detective guy. Riku-kun really needs to realize that he likes Chiaki-san.
1Renica the blueIt's so funny! Hee hee! I guess Chiaki-san gave up her crush on the T.V. detective guy. Riku-kun really needs to realize that he likes Chiaki-san.