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6/28/2009 c3 i v o r y w i n g s
really good so far, please donn't give up on this story!

please update or anything...
3/9/2006 c1 234The Moribund Marionette
Pretty well written, excepting a few grammatical things (be careful where you put your commas). I LOVE the whole humourous thing with the English accents and the alcohol. Very amusing. Pursue this further...One thing that gets me, though, is...well, she just turned around and he was THERE. How is this story going to evolve? Its plot, to me, is clear, but...supported, in spots, rather weakly. Otherwise, though...I mean, the diction and the whole thing with the word choice is great. It really gives the story a lot of humour!

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