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3/29/2006 c1 Bronwen Ackeley
I liked this one becuase you have a hidden metaphor; hard to pull off, but you did it. The comparison of black eyeliner to pain was really thoughtful. It's inspiring.

I have to say, these lines are my favorite:

Stares, whispers, all behind my backI feel weak, lettiing them all seeThis is my secret side

I like it. It's almost a cliché to say that crying is showing a weak side, but to me it never gets old, and it never looses it's power to make me emotional. I played it well. I'm proud of you. *thumbs-up*

~Bronwen, the Dark Angel~
3/29/2006 c1 612simpleplan13
I can relate to this.. I love the whole black thing.. great piece
3/16/2006 c1 64freeyourself
hey, long time no talk! nice poem =) so how are things?
3/11/2006 c1 5singitback
This one is beautiful. And yay! You've written more. :)
3/9/2006 c1 87Chaos Apple
This is so horribly, terribly sad and beautiful at the same time!

I have a few times where I feel like this, best of luck.

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