for Tasting the Atlantic coast8/7/2009 c1 
1tonight we bloom
Love the imagery in this.
You have a great writing style.
I'm off to go read more of your work!
1tonight we bloomLove the imagery in this.
You have a great writing style.
I'm off to go read more of your work!
11/27/2006 c1 78Ironic Presence
Oh, this reminds me about when I went to Cape May and got saltwater taffy... you made me happy. I'm a Jersey girl myself. :)
78Ironic PresenceOh, this reminds me about when I went to Cape May and got saltwater taffy... you made me happy. I'm a Jersey girl myself. :)
7/20/2006 c1 Winter Sun
Wow, I love the descriptions of this poem! You took natural and rather simple, common imagery and transformed it into a wonderful poem. 'lemon drop lights' and 'buckets of edible color' really caught my attention. It made the reader feel like they were there. I could almost taste the caramel and candy myself! (Now I actually want some, darnit...hehe)
To sum it up: Amazing. The ending was great. ('it was better than a postcard...') You have a knack for words portraying what you mean and imbuing the 5 senses right into your poem. It just seems so natural for you!
PS: Thanks for your review, and I am loving your pen name. :) Very sweet - literally!
Wow, I love the descriptions of this poem! You took natural and rather simple, common imagery and transformed it into a wonderful poem. 'lemon drop lights' and 'buckets of edible color' really caught my attention. It made the reader feel like they were there. I could almost taste the caramel and candy myself! (Now I actually want some, darnit...hehe)
To sum it up: Amazing. The ending was great. ('it was better than a postcard...') You have a knack for words portraying what you mean and imbuing the 5 senses right into your poem. It just seems so natural for you!
PS: Thanks for your review, and I am loving your pen name. :) Very sweet - literally!
7/4/2006 c1 90poetic abortion
Squee.
Fucking, squee.
I swear, besides gushing over how cute and positivly unique it was - describing the sense on different bodyparts, who da thunk? -, plus it was about my home - New Jersey coast, I presume, if not, I am an idiot - so it's a given that I immensly enjoyed this. Its cute, filled with imagery and just adorable; I love the opening line, how it feels so reminiscent, like this is all a dream, and how strong every other line it afterwords - it teases you, really, with that memory.
It really is beautiful and I love the way it is written; it really is undeniably cute.
~* Noelle
90poetic abortionSquee.
Fucking, squee.
I swear, besides gushing over how cute and positivly unique it was - describing the sense on different bodyparts, who da thunk? -, plus it was about my home - New Jersey coast, I presume, if not, I am an idiot - so it's a given that I immensly enjoyed this. Its cute, filled with imagery and just adorable; I love the opening line, how it feels so reminiscent, like this is all a dream, and how strong every other line it afterwords - it teases you, really, with that memory.
It really is beautiful and I love the way it is written; it really is undeniably cute.
~* Noelle
6/26/2006 c1 jeek
this is unbelievebly true. the stuff you're talking about. i have family in "joisey" and this very accuratly depicts the boardwalk at oceancity and atlantic city. great poem
this is unbelievebly true. the stuff you're talking about. i have family in "joisey" and this very accuratly depicts the boardwalk at oceancity and atlantic city. great poem
6/3/2006 c1 2DynamicEquilibrium
It's a beautiful poem, and I just had this perfect scene painted in my head. I just loved the sea, whcih you led me to taste, and those lights, which were haning above my head. I was there.Beautiful. Please keep writing!
-Dynamic Equilibrium
2DynamicEquilibriumIt's a beautiful poem, and I just had this perfect scene painted in my head. I just loved the sea, whcih you led me to taste, and those lights, which were haning above my head. I was there.Beautiful. Please keep writing!
-Dynamic Equilibrium
5/24/2006 c1 48shining defiance
The imagery reminds me of one summer evening I spent in a small town on the Atlantic. I really like it.
48shining defianceThe imagery reminds me of one summer evening I spent in a small town on the Atlantic. I really like it.
5/17/2006 c1 8lostx
Ha! I know who you are...Raspberry Twirl, I knew i recognized this poem from somewhere. Any ways, good imagery, I could really feel like I wasm there! Keep writing... : )!
8lostxHa! I know who you are...Raspberry Twirl, I knew i recognized this poem from somewhere. Any ways, good imagery, I could really feel like I wasm there! Keep writing... : )!
5/13/2006 c1 50Chandra-Moon
This is a good, strong poem. Well written, clear, original. Just good writing.
Just to be annoying, though:"The taste of the Atlantic coast between my toes."Maybe it's just me, but tasting stuff between your toes? Yuck. Inadvertent meaning, probably, but that's what I pictured.
I think this could be made more detail, and more capturing. Again, this poem is very promising, and good, but I think it could be even better if it was a bit more specificly written.
I liked the last line very much.
50Chandra-MoonThis is a good, strong poem. Well written, clear, original. Just good writing.
Just to be annoying, though:"The taste of the Atlantic coast between my toes."Maybe it's just me, but tasting stuff between your toes? Yuck. Inadvertent meaning, probably, but that's what I pictured.
I think this could be made more detail, and more capturing. Again, this poem is very promising, and good, but I think it could be even better if it was a bit more specificly written.
I liked the last line very much.
5/4/2006 c1 21Insane-Rassbery
Lovely. Gentle. Pondendering.
with the
"Alantic coast between my toes"
and
"lemon drop lights
you painted a picture in my head, so gourgous I wondeder if Monet (could compete.)
love,-Insane Rassbery P.S. Thank you for the review.
21Insane-RassberyLovely. Gentle. Pondendering.
with the
"Alantic coast between my toes"
and
"lemon drop lights
you painted a picture in my head, so gourgous I wondeder if Monet (could compete.)
love,-Insane Rassbery P.S. Thank you for the review.