for Oedipus Baby3/14/2006 c5 
19Rhea Valente
oh! so is THAT where the riddle of the Sphinx comes from? And... uhm... because he solved it, he married the queen.. who is... in fact... his mother - though they are both searching for answers?
readink on
19Rhea Valenteoh! so is THAT where the riddle of the Sphinx comes from? And... uhm... because he solved it, he married the queen.. who is... in fact... his mother - though they are both searching for answers?
readink on
3/14/2006 c3 Rhea Valente
oh!
is HE the one that killed his father and married his mother? if so, i know this! *slaps forehead*
oh, poor kid, doesn't know where he belongs... not by blood...
readink onwards (luffink disen.)
oh!
is HE the one that killed his father and married his mother? if so, i know this! *slaps forehead*
oh, poor kid, doesn't know where he belongs... not by blood...
readink onwards (luffink disen.)
3/14/2006 c2 Rhea Valente
ah ... ok .. i am followink...
they gave into their lust n soon had a child... which was ... marked? i think?
then taken away ... abandoned to these new ppls... wow. i'm intrigued. readink onwardsage:
ah ... ok .. i am followink...
they gave into their lust n soon had a child... which was ... marked? i think?
then taken away ... abandoned to these new ppls... wow. i'm intrigued. readink onwardsage:
3/14/2006 c1 Rhea Valente
hmm... havent googled it yet - so i am reading it afresh. ooh... i think i get the gist of it..
there's this king... and he doesn't hav any kids ... and ... this oracle personage tells him that if he has a child it'll kill him... okay..
and... he doesn't wanna sleep with ... his wife? ... because it'll be their downfall...
am i on the right lines? movink on:
hmm... havent googled it yet - so i am reading it afresh. ooh... i think i get the gist of it..
there's this king... and he doesn't hav any kids ... and ... this oracle personage tells him that if he has a child it'll kill him... okay..
and... he doesn't wanna sleep with ... his wife? ... because it'll be their downfall...
am i on the right lines? movink on:
3/13/2006 c7 5water lorelei
Whoa, she hung herself?
Man, she was miserable.
And Oedipus, he took her brooch and put the pin in his eye, for salvation?
Weird.
So, the Fates made him to destroy him... that makes no sense. Either that or I have it wrong.
Well, I'm guessing that this is the end, and might I say, this was an interesting piece of work, the style, the detail; interesting.
Nicely done, and I'm taking today to read all my favorite people's stuff, so expect more reviews.
Toodles!
*silent darkness*
5water loreleiWhoa, she hung herself?
Man, she was miserable.
And Oedipus, he took her brooch and put the pin in his eye, for salvation?
Weird.
So, the Fates made him to destroy him... that makes no sense. Either that or I have it wrong.
Well, I'm guessing that this is the end, and might I say, this was an interesting piece of work, the style, the detail; interesting.
Nicely done, and I'm taking today to read all my favorite people's stuff, so expect more reviews.
Toodles!
*silent darkness*
3/13/2006 c6 water lorelei
Ah, I have somewhat some CC this time. (is that supposed to make you happy? Or is it just something that we all need but not want?) You put gods as 'Gods'. really, it's just a typo, but it's something that can be fixed... *panicky* sorry, that's all I've got. It's supposed to be'gods'.
Ah, so the gods have abandoned Oedipus. Is that from the first chapter, his innocent sin? Meaning he had an affair with her? Hm...
This is turning out well, your writing is improving with every chapter! It's on my favs, if yoou wanted to know...
Happy Sailing!
*silent darkness*
Ah, I have somewhat some CC this time. (is that supposed to make you happy? Or is it just something that we all need but not want?) You put gods as 'Gods'. really, it's just a typo, but it's something that can be fixed... *panicky* sorry, that's all I've got. It's supposed to be'gods'.
Ah, so the gods have abandoned Oedipus. Is that from the first chapter, his innocent sin? Meaning he had an affair with her? Hm...
This is turning out well, your writing is improving with every chapter! It's on my favs, if yoou wanted to know...
Happy Sailing!
*silent darkness*
3/13/2006 c5 water lorelei
MY FAVORITE! "and passion bruised lips" beautiful. I loved it. "Innocent Devastation" such a great title for a chapter. So... he's king? What happened to Laios? Did he die, or is he a king of another country? ...whatever, this is a great chapter.
Farewell,
*silent darkness*
MY FAVORITE! "and passion bruised lips" beautiful. I loved it. "Innocent Devastation" such a great title for a chapter. So... he's king? What happened to Laios? Did he die, or is he a king of another country? ...whatever, this is a great chapter.
Farewell,
*silent darkness*
3/13/2006 c4 water lorelei
...strange. I can't make anything of it. Oedipus is angry at King Laios because Laios runs him over. The Fates say "It is beginning..." yeah. Ok. The plot is about to kick in? I know I'm making it sound simple, but I'm explaining it to myself. Everything was in big words, so I'm disecting it...
Oh well, I guess it'll be shown in the next chapter...
*silent darkness*
...strange. I can't make anything of it. Oedipus is angry at King Laios because Laios runs him over. The Fates say "It is beginning..." yeah. Ok. The plot is about to kick in? I know I'm making it sound simple, but I'm explaining it to myself. Everything was in big words, so I'm disecting it...
Oh well, I guess it'll be shown in the next chapter...
*silent darkness*
3/13/2006 c3 water lorelei
I get it now! The king wanted the son away because he was to kill him! I know this greek story.
This was well-done, everything is piecing together. I know, short review with no CC, but, this chapter was easy to understand, so I'll leave it at that.
Farewell,
*silent darkness*
I get it now! The king wanted the son away because he was to kill him! I know this greek story.
This was well-done, everything is piecing together. I know, short review with no CC, but, this chapter was easy to understand, so I'll leave it at that.
Farewell,
*silent darkness*
3/13/2006 c2 water lorelei
I don't understand why the king would want the child away. Was he Oedipus? There were three things going on in this chapter, all kept in suspense, but there's not enough information, leaving me (and I'm not saying that other readers are as dumb as me) saying 'What the heck is going on?'
There were intersting things going on though. The nail driven through some person's ankles... the first thought that came to me was 'Is someone being crucified?', seeing as I'm part of the Christian faith. This was very well put together. Lots of detail entwining around the plot.
Good Job, keep writing!
*silent darkness*
I don't understand why the king would want the child away. Was he Oedipus? There were three things going on in this chapter, all kept in suspense, but there's not enough information, leaving me (and I'm not saying that other readers are as dumb as me) saying 'What the heck is going on?'
There were intersting things going on though. The nail driven through some person's ankles... the first thought that came to me was 'Is someone being crucified?', seeing as I'm part of the Christian faith. This was very well put together. Lots of detail entwining around the plot.
Good Job, keep writing!
*silent darkness*
3/13/2006 c1 water lorelei
This is interesting- the first time I've read a poetry/story-type work. This was slightly confusing... it took a little while to somewhat understand it, but in the end... well... what am I saying? I'm confuzzling myself.
The description was lovely, and your writing skills are developing quite nicely.
The only CC I have for you is to make it a little more clear. (giving CC is really hard for me... since I know how much work people put into their stories) Take a little more time to read the chapter (I'm guessing... since this is a story) to yourself and put yourself into a readers shoes- not knowing of the plot or anything else that makes the story great. Try and see if you can picture what is happening in your mind. If you can, you are one of the greatest writers on Fp.
I especially like the name Laios. Its got a nice ring to it. Nice choice!
A Sweet Ado to you, My Lady, Happy Sailing,
*silent darkness*
This is interesting- the first time I've read a poetry/story-type work. This was slightly confusing... it took a little while to somewhat understand it, but in the end... well... what am I saying? I'm confuzzling myself.
The description was lovely, and your writing skills are developing quite nicely.
The only CC I have for you is to make it a little more clear. (giving CC is really hard for me... since I know how much work people put into their stories) Take a little more time to read the chapter (I'm guessing... since this is a story) to yourself and put yourself into a readers shoes- not knowing of the plot or anything else that makes the story great. Try and see if you can picture what is happening in your mind. If you can, you are one of the greatest writers on Fp.
I especially like the name Laios. Its got a nice ring to it. Nice choice!
A Sweet Ado to you, My Lady, Happy Sailing,
*silent darkness*
3/10/2006 c6 Broken Melody
Whoa... this is such a uniqe tale. I'm unsure if I have read anything like what you write in this style. I think it is beautiful.
Whoa... this is such a uniqe tale. I'm unsure if I have read anything like what you write in this style. I think it is beautiful.
3/10/2006 c5 Broken Melody
Pardon me but I forget who Jocast is? Umm...
The poor man lives in misrey... Wait his parents isn't Jocast and the other person, do they rule instead?
Pardon me but I forget who Jocast is? Umm...
The poor man lives in misrey... Wait his parents isn't Jocast and the other person, do they rule instead?