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4/11/2006 c1 6hear me smile
Those last two lines are wonderful. So expressive! I can't wait ot read more.
4/10/2006 c1 30Sugar-Craze
Love the line, 'And flirting with the night air', feels so, real... Is this a real event?
4/9/2006 c1 87Naibz
pretty good, but I feel that there should be another line added. after "on what we were missing" you should add: and to what we would be partaking in.

I dunno. it just rhymes and add's a bit more to the poem.

anyway. good piece.
3/11/2006 c1 a lonely september
'i filled him in on what we were missing' gorgeous way to end. 'flirting with the night air' that's just gorgeous.
3/11/2006 c1 144chaos called creation
In love with those last two lines.
3/11/2006 c1 11hippos-anoonymus
Loved the subtle message, my fave line and flirting with the night air, it reminds me of a flippy skirt that hovers of your knees that's flirting with night air...I don't know I'm weird

but i lovyed it lotsy yeayuh!

keep it up

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