for Whisper In My Ear7/31/2009 c1 
5CuriousContradiction
This almost sounds like it could be a song. :)
I like the rhymes in this. It could be a little more consistent so that there's a legit rhyme scheme instead of rhyme-whenever-it-seems-to-fit, but when you do rhyme, it definitely works.
Favorite part: keep on glistening, and I'll keep listenin'. Very cool. :)
My only thing about this is... the poem deserves so much more. Your summary wasn't a summary. I don't mean for that to sound mean, but it just wasn't. I wish you had something that did the actual poem justice. You can do that explanation as an author's note. In the summary, you could just choose a few lines from your poem or something like that.
Anyways, great poem. I liked it a lot!
(If it's not too much to ask, do you mind taking a look at my story "Maybe"? If you do take a look, please skip the prologue. If you decide not to, that's fine too. I'm reviewing your work because I honestly enjoyed the poem.)
5CuriousContradictionThis almost sounds like it could be a song. :)
I like the rhymes in this. It could be a little more consistent so that there's a legit rhyme scheme instead of rhyme-whenever-it-seems-to-fit, but when you do rhyme, it definitely works.
Favorite part: keep on glistening, and I'll keep listenin'. Very cool. :)
My only thing about this is... the poem deserves so much more. Your summary wasn't a summary. I don't mean for that to sound mean, but it just wasn't. I wish you had something that did the actual poem justice. You can do that explanation as an author's note. In the summary, you could just choose a few lines from your poem or something like that.
Anyways, great poem. I liked it a lot!
(If it's not too much to ask, do you mind taking a look at my story "Maybe"? If you do take a look, please skip the prologue. If you decide not to, that's fine too. I'm reviewing your work because I honestly enjoyed the poem.)
3/12/2006 c1 28Tsuyunoinochi Koukyo
I used to feel this way... special and... I'm sure you know. It's sad now to think of it and know that things like that won't happen again... but it's up to Fate I suppose. ^_^
Good poem, again! You are a good poem writer person, XD! Hope you get over that writer's block soon!
28Tsuyunoinochi KoukyoI used to feel this way... special and... I'm sure you know. It's sad now to think of it and know that things like that won't happen again... but it's up to Fate I suppose. ^_^
Good poem, again! You are a good poem writer person, XD! Hope you get over that writer's block soon!
3/11/2006 c1 39SliversofSilverPain
perty. I like it. I love the title and the repitition through out; beautiful
39SliversofSilverPainperty. I like it. I love the title and the repitition through out; beautiful