Just In
Community
Forum
V
More
for ancient yesterdays

4/12/2006 c1 11les petits bateaux
Simply astounding. Your descriptions are flawless and always seem to convey a deep message. Bravo.
4/10/2006 c1 15Lovetress
Although I don't know exactly what this poem is about it provokes interesting images and thoughts. I especially liked the one with the willow tree, where you can go in and out of it but not around. There a sort of mystic-ness [for a lack of better word] about it. I love the title, it gives me a kind of inner peace, or profondness. Overall this was a unique piece and pretty well done, though there is room for improvement. I felt that the second stanza was missing something and there wasnt enough flow in the third. The ending was thought provking, though I had negative feelings toward it, probably because I'm a feminist...lol
3/12/2006 c1 73Jezsh
I think this meaning of this is slightly beyond me but I like how it's written and I think even if the meaning is quite hard to grasp, the feeling in it are accessible. I like the descriptions of stretching out like the sky and peering into someone's mind like a book at bedtime. Really nice imagery.Just one think though, peek is spelled without an e and I think forthcoming is all one word. Nice work!
3/12/2006 c1 18deathbyeuphoria
Holy sh*t. Amazing.
3/12/2006 c1 5Drops of Jewpiter
great poem. i love the line 'i praise my forth coming lord with flowers' good job ;)~dropsofjewpiter~

Twitter . Help . Sign Up . Cookies . Privacy . Terms of Service