for Pearls of White and Grey8/11/2011 c1 Hayonushi Takintoshiba
I love that; that last line.
Everyone needs to breathe.
That actually gave me goosebumps. And I get what you mean, how it just... is.
I love that; that last line.
Everyone needs to breathe.
That actually gave me goosebumps. And I get what you mean, how it just... is.
5/28/2010 c1 lijuan
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4/5/2010 c1 Lenny
Perfect story, you have accomplished in it's just being. Keep writing more stories, specially some like this.
Perfect story, you have accomplished in it's just being. Keep writing more stories, specially some like this.
9/11/2009 c1 
128vitriolicvermilion
Ah. Everyone needs to breathe, indeed, and this is a breath of fresh air.
I like the italics-instead-of-quotations. I'm a personal proponent of changing grammar rules because it works.
The ending is...it's a little bit sad, but it's profound, too.
It lets you wonder and hope about what happens to them...
128vitriolicvermilionAh. Everyone needs to breathe, indeed, and this is a breath of fresh air.
I like the italics-instead-of-quotations. I'm a personal proponent of changing grammar rules because it works.
The ending is...it's a little bit sad, but it's profound, too.
It lets you wonder and hope about what happens to them...
6/23/2009 c1 51for shame
this was amazing.
it just is.
there's no real connection between some of the paragraphs - they're just observations of things that happen.
but they tie together so perfectly to show someone so perfectly flawed.
if i had an ideal-but-horribly-skewed relationship, it would be like this.
it's so amazing, so beautiful.
congratulations; you've written a miracle.
51for shamethis was amazing.
it just is.
there's no real connection between some of the paragraphs - they're just observations of things that happen.
but they tie together so perfectly to show someone so perfectly flawed.
if i had an ideal-but-horribly-skewed relationship, it would be like this.
it's so amazing, so beautiful.
congratulations; you've written a miracle.
8/27/2008 c1 22emmaliefje
Seems pretty neutral to me. I think you accomplished your goal of it 'just be'-ing. I liked it too. I liked the last lines. "Everyone needs to breathe". Cute. Well done!
22emmaliefjeSeems pretty neutral to me. I think you accomplished your goal of it 'just be'-ing. I liked it too. I liked the last lines. "Everyone needs to breathe". Cute. Well done!
8/18/2008 c1 40HurtMe
Beautifully written. I love that you captured the feeling of a loveless romance. You also did really well with the druggie vibe. Nice job.
40HurtMeBeautifully written. I love that you captured the feeling of a loveless romance. You also did really well with the druggie vibe. Nice job.
3/29/2008 c1 29Mad-4-Manga
I like. :)
People are always writing boy slash, but I just never see female slash. It makes me sad. ;-;
I'm glad to see one person writing some!
Thankees!
*HUG*
29Mad-4-MangaI like. :)
People are always writing boy slash, but I just never see female slash. It makes me sad. ;-;
I'm glad to see one person writing some!
Thankees!
*HUG*
2/17/2008 c1 233kelsi bones
Well, even if you're not sure if you like this, I certainly do. It's incredibly real, and honest, even if the ending isn't happy or sad or anything.
"You're not important... Easily replaceable. Common, like air."
"Everyone needs to breathe."
Those lines are AMAZING.
k.X
233kelsi bonesWell, even if you're not sure if you like this, I certainly do. It's incredibly real, and honest, even if the ending isn't happy or sad or anything.
"You're not important... Easily replaceable. Common, like air."
"Everyone needs to breathe."
Those lines are AMAZING.
k.X
7/3/2007 c1 coming up on infrared
i love this story. i think not having quotation marks works really well. i also agree with the just be idea. i think you really made that happen.
i love this story. i think not having quotation marks works really well. i also agree with the just be idea. i think you really made that happen.